I Want to Become a Strong One in Armor

The first chapter is really well written. The conflict between the fiery ideal and the cruel reality, as well as the protagonist's unyielding heart in the end, vividly describe the protagonist's image. [Cry]

It is a darker world above Shadow Power, mixed with the tragedy and spiritual core behind various knights, and a thought feedback that is closer to reality. It is great, but I feel that the protagonist's thought changes can be more natural. It does not need to be emphasized in the main text. It is also good to appropriately add reasonable transitions and other character profiles. You can learn from the extra drama of Shadow Power to intersperse more character backgrounds and chapters or even short stories. Come on, the score will be 9 in the morning

Yes, it looks very nice and has a special photography feel, with a bit of Japanese manga style. There are quite a few things to sew, especially the blood boundary battle line hahahaha. I have caught up with the latest chapter, and I feel that the author has made a lot of progress in the narrative. The beginning of the narrative is a bit cumbersome and flashy, with a lot of various settings, which is a bit tiring to watch, and there are some old routines, but I can still accept this. Internet articles are not literary masterpieces, but should still focus on plot. Most readers prefer a narrative style that is concise and relaxed. The shortcomings are not hidden, the picture quality is quite good, and the funny and contrasting aspects are not missing. I personally think that the writing is still good, including the characterization, Dihua's daily life, etc. Overall, it still has potential. I hope the author will get better and better, and I hope this book will become a big hit.

Why do I see other people's comments in many paragraphs, but they disappear when I click on them? In fact, I quite like the writing, but you have too much foreshadowing in the plot. Every other paragraph, you start to say how many years from now, how many years from now, I say it is not nice, I don't know if you can persist until how many years from now [face covering], and after watching too much, I don't feel it anymore, I just feel boring, and if you may change the outline in the future, Yes, it will limit you, and there are still a lot of things that are a bit watery. Your main plot is too slow, and it is very confusing. Hmm, I looked at the previous one when I was born, and then I looked at the next one, and then I looked at the next one when I was 3 years old, and when I was 10 years old, you choose to leave foreshadowing in the middle, but you have to give people a transition, and there is a strong sense of division, but I still like to watch this kind of subject, and I will give you five stars to support it.

Well, yes, the first chapter introduces what happened in the few days before the protagonist died before traveling through time, and roughly shaped the protagonist's character. Then the next few chapters will be about what happened to the protagonist in another world, but the author seems to like to tell the story in advance, that is, after the protagonist has an incident with a person, if the character will have some big events afterwards and become a person with a great status, he will tell the incident in advance. For example, after a certain year, someone with a certain identity will still remember this night and what the protagonist said. If there are others, it would be fine, but this book uses a lot of narrative techniques, so I personally recommend it. But if there are people who don't like narrative techniques, then you can feel free to [smile][smile][smile]

Frog Fun, it's so well written, it feels like watching anime, I hope it won't stop updating.

It's really well written, and I found something good on Tomato. [Cry]

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates.

Five stars for encouragement, let's talk about the conclusion first. The first chapter is great. If it weren't for reincarnation, it could be a short story. However, the subsequent chapters often reveal some future events, which made me feel very strange when I read the book for the first time. Then there were too many repetitive words (settings) that I went over and over again. The future events are okay if I talk about them, but it's a bit strange if there are too many.

The first chapter is brilliantly written, colliding reality and ideals, and using tragedy to interpret the core of chivalry. In addition, the rhythm is also very well controlled. The story is split up using # and closely connected. It is both logical and easy to understand. It is really eye-catching.