One Piece: Chasing Aokiji Across the Grand Line

Although there is a slight flaw, the heroine in the first article feels weak and desperate, but the heroine's job is not to fight but to tell fortunes, which is still very interesting. It would be better if the heroine and Kuzan have more scenes [shy], but it is not clearly written why she can't be with the heroine for a while. After getting up, he couldn't do it again. Sengoku knew that the heroine was a scholar, and he was going to let Akainu go and be with the heroine. If Akainu knew the heroine's identity, wouldn't he just kill him? After the heroine got pregnant, he mistakenly thought that Kuzan was with her because of orders and then ran away on his own. , It would be too ordinary for the two of them to meet again after a few years. The heroine's portable system has a very low sense of presence, like a portable space [laughing]. In the second chapter, the heroine's force level is quite high, but some small details are not handled well. I saw the heroine going to participate in the war on the top. At that time, I thought that the heroine had become powerful, or had turned into her original form. After all, the heroine had disappeared for more than ten years. Not to mention how much she had grown up, at least she was powerful. Also, when the heroine resurrected people, she was rejected by the world, so she vomited some blood! The reaction will be a little bigger, at least it will be transformed into the original form for a few days, and then Shanks will have a deeper relationship with the heroine doing this and then doing that. The heroine's character in the early stage was a little bit unbeatable, so in the first life, I was a human for more than ten years. I am a human being with my two sisters-in-law, so I don't want to tone it down. Then go for it, if it doesn't work, don't have the first life. If you change it a little bit, it will be like a little boy who grew up in the demon clan and was manipulated. I have never seen an anime where the heroine travels to the world before the pirates. This demon has a long life. This is with Shanks. What will happen if Shanks dies of old age? The above is just my personal opinion. Overall, the author's writing is quite good. At least the two stories between the heroine and the male protagonist are very sweet [Sending my heart][Sending my heart]

Good health good health [send heart] [send heart] The author has made great efforts and remains stable. It's not bad at all, it's just a bit unreadable. Looking forward to what Shanks will do next, please do your best

I've finished reading it. It's quite interesting. It's divided into two volumes. Both volumes are different worlds. The CP of the first volume is Kuzan (Qing Pheasant), and the CP of the second volume is Shanks. The story is good and the characters are well created. That's it... After reading it, I got up in the middle of the night and shouted: No, why is he? ! Are they worthy? ? ? Ah? ! ! ! Damn it, a sweet and soft girl has been defiled by a smelly man! ! ! ! ! In the first volume, the heroine can tell fortunes, she is very cute, her strength is average, and she has a sword; in the second volume, the heroine is a pure-blooded demon who is possessed by Inuyasha, she is very strong and beautiful, but she was fooled away by the red hair! ! ! Damn it Shanks! ! ! ! ! Both books have battles at the top, and Ace is saved in both. You can read the rest by yourself.

I like it very much, very beautiful

The story of Ao Pheasant was okay. Mainly because the heroine was more happy. Ao Pheasant was miserable. He was entangled by the heroine. After they got together, the heroine misunderstood Ao Pheasant and ran away. After running for more than ten years, Ao Pheasant could not be found. After giving birth to a child, he still didn't recognize Ao Pheasant. Kuzan was really miserable. Shanks's story is relatively short, and I feel like Shanks doesn't appear very frequently, but the ending of Shanks' story is very good, with both children and a happy life. The writing is a bit shabby, but the content is generally pretty good.

Although there are only two stories, in the same world background, there are no repeated plots and the plot development is reasonable. There is no problem after reading the first story and reading the second story. There is no need to worry about confusing the two worlds.

Author, you can actually write the two plots separately and write them into two books

The green pheasant is hot, but the fruit is cold

The ending caught me off guard, but it was very well written! ! ! ! !

This article is super beautiful and super sweet. You must read it! To be honest, the ending of the main text of Aokiji feels very real and very sharp! Although he also has a side ending of he, I think that be is the real one, and the plot should be like this. And the red-haired ending at the back is really funny and reasonable. It's very red-haired.