Xuanhuan: How Did My Sect Become an Ancient Forbidden Land?

How dare you fall in love with prosperity if you have been poor all your life, and how dare you mislead a beautiful woman if you have the breeze on your sleeves. How dare you talk about your family if you don't have enough meals? How dare you talk about your family's success when the four seasons are drifting away. The worry of lack of money in the five elements arises from the heart, and it is difficult for everything to go as planned if the six paths are not helpful. The seven exquisite and exquisite ones are read by all the people in the world, and the eight hundred solitary and cold ones are hard to hold back and return with ardent love. Nine dynasties sang the same song and regretted their past lives. Ten years of dreams left them and they followed the destination of their hearts.

I just read the opening chapter, which is pretty good. I would like to make some suggestions here. 1. It's better for the protagonist's father not to be alive, otherwise who will the sect listen to if he is found? What if he likes a disciple of your sect and then uses his identity to have sex? Do you care? And you are not his real son, you came from time-to-time! 2. Please write as much about the development of the sect as possible in the sect style. I see that there is no content about the sect so far. For example, where did the protagonist practice? What buildings are there in the sect? Where do disciples rest? Where do you practice? 3. The protagonist of the sect leader should try to stay in the sect as much as possible, and do not go out often. Don't say that he has to go through life and death experiences, or experience in the world of mortals. That is not what the sect leader should do. You are the sect leader and you still go through it? You are the old BOSS, and only the disciples can experience it. Developing sects is the core of sect style. The outside world can be shown from the perspective of a disciple going out for training. If the disciple fails and is bullied by an old monster, the protagonist will appear or the elder of the sect will deal with it. 4. The protagonist's realm should be significantly ahead of the entire sect. 5. I personally like that there are various unique buildings and secret realms in the sect. You can write about some disciples, elders practicing in these characteristic buildings, exploring secret realms within the sect, etc. This will make the entire sect fuller, otherwise the sect will feel empty. I have thought of these points for the time being, I hope the author can see and adopt them, thank you!

Come on, come on, everything else is okay, but there are a few disciples (see Chapter 29)

Hope, everywhere in the world, don't end it, I will spend money for you, as long as you keep updating, I will burn paper for you

It's very interesting. I've read more than 700 chapters so far. I get up every day and wait for updates. I don't even understand what so many people are talking about in the comment section. I haven't even held a girl's hand so far, and there's nothing to warm my stomach. In the later period, there will be very few female apprentice scenes. I really don't understand what a bunch of people are talking about.

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking percussion

It's well written and I like to read it. It's a refreshing book.

I have read this novel from the first chapter to the present. Now that it is finished, I feel a lot of emotion. After all, I have witnessed the magnificent life of the characters written in this novel. Suddenly seeing the ending is like seeing the end of a story. In fact, there is always a feeling of reluctance, but this book The ending I finally wrote was something I didn't expect at all. It feels like the end of this book is written in a montage way. I guess the author may want to say that we want to know what will happen next, so we can imagine it ourselves, or maybe we will open a new book and continue the story below. So, I can predict what will happen next, and listen to the breakdown next time! [Make a face][make a face]

Really highly recommended

Very good, very good! Awesome! You guys take a look first! I'm leaving first!