Gender Swap: Selling Myself as a Battle Idol

I read a few chapters at the beginning and then at the back. It has been revised well, but there are still a few points that the author still doesn't seem to care about. 1. The description of the character's appearance seems to be lacking. 2. Description of character expressions and environment description. 3 Language organization. / Of course, I have only read the latest few chapters, and you are welcome to add anything you may have missed. [Thinking] I looked at it again and saw why the first few chapters only had more than 1,000 words, but Chapter 7 had so many words.

As I look at it, I don't know what I'm looking at. The writing is too messy and I've added a lot of unnecessary stuff. I hope you won't be so arrogant this afternoon and can do it in an interactive way [Thinking]

Let's not talk about sentence fragmentation or anything like that. What's going on is so long-winded. I almost vomited blood when I heard it.

Personally, can you improve the sentence segmentation? Looks very uncomfortable

Meet the author. But what does this book mean?

The content is a bit messy, I suggest the author to read it after he finishes writing.

How to say it? You are not just water, you are sea water

Very nice

The subject matter is very good, and so is the writing. But can you connect the sentences more smoothly? It's so painful to read.

AI writes a book? Even the sentences are not fluent [Like]