Cultivating Immortality in Harry Potter

I think it's pretty good, especially killing Hermione. I really hate Hermione when I read Harry Potter fanfics. Maybe it's because I'm arrogant, but in this novel, it's really cool to kill Hermione.

It feels very good, quite novel, and it's good that there is no female protagonist. I'm looking forward to the follow-up. It's quite humorous. I just want to know if the protagonist will have a partner. Of course it's not a girl. And the author, please give me a lot of supportｸﾞｯ!(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧

It's so beautiful. I'm giving you one less star because your style of writing is not what I like, but it's really good.

This book gives me a headache every day. The language is not coherent, but it is illogical. The author does not mean that learning a lot can be regarded as illiterate. Typos appear more than five times in each chapter. It can be said that it has no contribution to the structure of the world view, and the combat effectiveness system is even more chaotic. Okay (throw away your brain) It's a great book that comes once in a thousand years. I highly recommend it. I haven't resisted such a book in thousands of years. Ababa baba baba.

Wow, it's the first time I've seen someone kill Hermione. It's so cool. The author is awesome. It's just that the plot behind it feels a bit confusing, so I can sort it out. Come on (ง ˙o˙)ว

Author, if you don't hurry up and update it, it's just that little bit. The author's person is just that damn little bit. You're still here waiting for the update. When are you going to wait? When everyone is gone, huh, you still have to write. What do you write? What a waste of time you wrote. You only wrote a little about people, and you haven't updated it yet. You've been waiting for four or five days. How long do you want us to wait?

After reading two chapters, I found that the writing was not good, the descriptions were stiff and confusing, the protagonist's character was not likable, the character's actions lacked motivation, and there were also problems such as typos and punctuation errors. The author should still be in school, keep working hard, and hone his writing skills. The current situation is that not many people will read it, so you can go slower and revise it slowly. Take a look at it after you finish writing it, and revise it if it doesn't make sense. If it doesn't work, delete that paragraph, and it might be better. And never write something the author said in the middle of a chapter. The reading experience will be poor. These words can be said at the end of the chapter. There are also a few sentences at the beginning of the first chapter that can be placed in the introduction. The introduction is used to introduce the general content of the book. Finally, I hope that the author will gradually get better, and if the character design collapses and becomes OOC, the book will be hopeless, especially the characters in the original Harry Potter books. I don't know if the author has read it. If not, just read it before writing... The main thing about the protagonist is that he has no characteristics, at least It is not reflected in the beginning, and the system is perfectly fine for the protagonist. You can even write the protagonist to resist the system in the later stage. However, the protagonist cannot be without characteristics and has nothing to remember. As a result, the book has no desire to be read, and it will not retain readers.

Ask a few questions for the author (❁ᴗ͈ˬᴗ͈)◞ There is a bit too much psychological description of the protagonist, a bit like a first-person perspective. Sometimes the behavior of some characters is a bit inexplicable, as if some plots were missed and a bit messy. However, from the description of the scenes in the article, we can see that the author wrote this book very carefully. Come on! ❤️❤️❤️

It looks great, good luck to the author!

I would like to suggest changing the cover. I actually think you could do some follow-up plots in the United States. Otherwise, this will make people think that your story line is relatively short. For example, the story line needs to be very big. Regarding the introduction, you can interchange the third-person perspective and the first-person perspective. Sometimes you can also use second-person perspective. This would be better. Otherwise it will be very troublesome and difficult to understand. As for the plot, I feel like some things could be deleted. Then Gryffindor can add some IQ.