Quest System

What you are writing is a novel, and the novel should contain a plot. Don't always insert some personal opinions. Who should you tell these personal opinions to? Haven't you heard that there are 1,000 Hamlets for 1,000 readers? Your personal opinions and arguments are equivalent to killing all 1,000 Hamlets! What the reader thinks is his business and has nothing to do with you. Don't force your subjective opinions onto the reader!

Damn, don't do it all the time (DS Mandarin). It's really annoying if it's too many.

The first three chapters put me off