Reboot the Underworld from the Start

The premise is my type, but I don't know what's wrong with the author. Starting from chapter 7, the whole article reads like a jumble of disjointed thoughts.

What the hell is this book? I've only read a little bit and I'm already completely baffled. It's a mess from beginning to end. I have no idea what kind of plot you're trying to write. One minute it's a ghost, the next it's a sister, then it says the sister is dead, then it says she just has amnesia? What, do I look like an idiot?

It's completely incoherent, I have no idea what it's saying, it's utterly nonsensical.

I'll give it two stars, as a small token of appreciation for the author's hard work. Now for my feedback: I completely don't understand what it's about. The most important point about the underworld is that it doesn't concern itself with the mortal realm. Secondly, the underworld lacks corresponding deities and a clear direction; it's basically just the protagonist living a game-like life in the mortal world.

This is just a jumbled mess; I have no idea where the first two chapters came from. And from the very beginning, I have no idea what I'm writing! It's making my head spin.

What kind of writing is this? The plot jumps around like you're diving!

Oh no, this is a mess, it's completely nonsensical!!

What kind of nonsense is this? It's all gibberish!

I was completely baffled...

It's a mess, a complete mess.