The Age of Spirits: I Returned to the Past with My Backpack

No, I don't understand. In Chapter 16, the protagonist worked so hard to complete the task, but in the end the reward was taken by someone else. Then why did you write this? Make up the word count?

That girl who suddenly came out was really vicious

If you want to write a dark novel, but the protagonist is a fool, it is not impossible to write dark novels in elf novels. However, the protagonist at least has the ability to survive in the dark world. Whether it is smart or cunning, at least let readers know that the protagonist has the ability to keep himself alive. Unfortunately, we have not seen it yet. Moreover, the supporting characters have various mentally retarded operations, such as the one who blackmailed the protagonist, saw the protagonist taking money so readily, and just let him go? Dark writing requires brains and thoughts. If you can't write it, then don't engage in so many mentally retarded operations.

The protagonist is threatened at the beginning and continues to be threatened and tortured. What do you think?

It was the appearance of that woman that made me not in the mood to continue reading. Call for help or I will report you. A reborn person is carrying props from his past life and someone else is using his identity to threaten you...

How should I put it? First of all, Su Baimu appeared out of nowhere, and the dialogue was a bit naive. The "girl who had a promise a few years ago" didn't show any emotion. In the few chapters of the exchange, I didn't see any emotion between the two. It was too bland. Then there is the protagonist's character. There are too many concerns, especially the previous performance of pretending to be weak. In Feilu like this It doesn't work, because Feilu is a cool writing site, and the protagonist of Feilu needs to be invincible and sweeping among his peers at the same stage. Finally, there is the issue of the villain, who is too brainless. The dialogue in the article is just a few sentences, and each of them has basically no IQ (=_=). I suggest the author appropriately add inner thoughts to the supporting characters, not too many. The supporting characters can't talk about everything one by one, and use some inner drama to increase the IQ of the supporting characters.

You said you were lazy, forget it. This woman in the beginning, if I were the male protagonist, I would just open the door and kill someone. I don't care if you have any purpose. If you dare to threaten me, you will bear the consequences.

Silently open your own Pokemon, and swipe it into its 100-block backpack, the computer's Master Ball, magical candies...

This content seems to have been seen at the starting point of a similar plot. The protagonist is also reborn. The initial Pokémon are Magikarp and Unicorn. However, at the beginning, he obtained the water slate based on the memory of rebirth and gave it to Magikarp. Then he also went to a ruin door. Magikarp opened the stone door (actually it was opened by sensing the water slate door). There was also a Larulas inside for the protagonist to conquer.

It's time to bring out my full collection of props and thousands of Master Ball candies