Fairy Tail: Naruto's Dojutsu System

I just graduated from college and occasionally like to read novels and anime. This is my first attempt to write a novel. Please point out any mistakes in the text. I accept any criticism from you.

I feel like the protagonist of Feilu will die without the Sharingan. Nine out of ten books have it.

The new book is updated at such a speed. I suggest you just go to bed. Of course, if you don't care about your grades, just pretend I didn't say anything. Please forgive me for being so straightforward.

This looks awkward, and it feels like the writing is wrong. Why not call it the Ninjutsu system, or the Naruto system.

Kill him, cut off the root, the spring breeze will blow and it will grow again

The evil eye of direct death, the dragon eye, the annihilation eye, the complex eye,

The protagonist only has the Sharingan in Naruto. Do you have any legendary eyes from other worlds, such as the compound eye?

How many days does it take for you to update? One stick at a time.

This name makes me look funny

Here are the two promised updates. Let me tell you, if your writing hadn't been pretty good, I would have stopped reading it a long time ago.