My Older Sister

Is this protagonist too soft? Just like a pussy. Can't you order it as a man?

Isn't the snowflakes cold wind**? Is there something wrong with the painting style?

This protagonist is simply a soft-footed shrimp.

The text is a bit dry and there are issues with punctuation.

Author, this pig's feet are a bit soft.

Author, do you have something wrong with your brain? Your book will definitely not make money if you don't revise it properly.