The Snow King of Hogwarts

The Harry Potter fanfics in Feilu's novels are getting worse and worse. They're all poisonous and can't be read at all.

The physical quality of the natural spirit fluctuates, but it can also be used in close combat. It can use ice-condensed sabers. For magic, consider Esdeath, Blue Pheasant, Ice Cavalry, Ice Ball, Blizzard, Ice Cone Launcher, Ground Freeze, Frozen Time Capsule, Ice Age. It is best to freeze Li Huo or Fei Lu, which is more powerful.

Author, you should know what we want to see. We want to see Elsa's famous scene and her using magic as she pleases, even if it's because she doesn't want to walk up the stairs of Hogwarts and freeze the stairs herself, and create ice and snow creatures instead of Olaf. Finally, in Harry Potter, wandless spellcasting is something that even fifth graders and above may not be able to do. It shouldn't just be a surprise. It's too ordinary. Also, the protagonist's hair should be turned into beautiful white highlights or completely white when using large-scale ice magic. This is normal in Harry Potter.

What happened to the author?

You must have a soul attack. It can be ice or something else. It is best not to use the Unforgivable Curse. Take out the soul of the diary and you can write it well after playing with it for a while. It does not need to be done right away, but it is best to complete it completely during the vacation of one to two. Add more combat power during the vacation and it will look better immediately.

There are too many people around. Try to change it so that it is not a character in the original book. The more people you play with, the less control you will have. The more characters there are, the more likely some people will not like it. If the new book does not receive enough attention and good reviews, the author will not write better. On the contrary, But I am worried about the eunuch's adultery, and it is better to have more plots using magic. It is obviously a self-disciplined academic system, so it should be aloof and too playful. She has no emotional intelligence, poor self-control, and poor expression and movement management. The heroine Hermione is not too outstanding, and there is no emotional line at all.

Where is the protagonist's wand? I didn't see the protagonist buying it.

It's okay now. Don't rush to make friends with the Weasley brothers. Seamus doesn't need to communicate. He can attract some readers by himself. Passers-by and friends fade away little by little. In class, you can show yourself to others and give some guidance to your classmates, but not too many people and don't let too many people flatter you. Jin may add a little prophecy, whether it is true or false, and add some prophecy talent to mix the truth and falsehood. A heavy snowfall in the big summer to prove his identity as an ice elf. Some wind and snow surrounds to show his strength. The troll does not have to slip. The original one was too weak and was suppressed by the gun.

If you can't get rid of the passers-by, let the protagonist create a small organization, let's talk about mutual aid and learning, and then gradually reduce the sense of presence. There shouldn't be too many people, but in the future it is best to have some main characters from the four colleges, not Malfoy's followers. In the process, polish the protagonist's leadership temperament more, and write more maturely.

Currently 20 chapters have been updated. The rhythm and writing style of the novel are fine. I hope the author will maintain it and don't mess with it as soon as it is released.