Seafaring: I Travel Between Worlds with Erza to Overthrow Imu

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Please hurry up and kill the evil dragon later. Don't drag out the word count. I've seen a lot of plots that involve pulling all kinds of strings even though you have the strength to do so. It's really annoying.

Fairy Tail's attribute system is completely overpowered by the natural system. Various natural systems are defeated by dragon slayer, god slayer, and evil slayer.

As for Aaron's part, in fact, it would be better to write it as passively being troubled, instead of actively helping Nami and helping her in return. For example, the protagonist comes back the next day, and the explanation to Nami is that the protagonist looks serious, and I went to get to know your village... In return, I will help you solve the problem, Nami persuades, the protagonist shows the ability, and does not need to say the source of the ability, just what he just obtained. Ability, you don't want your village to be oppressed by fishmen all the time, right? But now I'm here, leave everything to me, no matter how bad it is, it can't be any worse, right? Then the protagonist rises into the sky, transforms into a dragon, rushes straight to Aaron's Paradise, and then lands in front of Aaron instantly. Aaron saw the golden dragon soaring into the sky flying towards him. Before he could be surprised, he only heard a loud noise, Then he found that the divine dragon transformed into a human and landed in front of him. The thick smoke dissipated, and what came into view first was the majestic golden dragon eyes, and then a handsome and full of energy appeared from the smoke.

Is the dialogue written a bit awkward? The main character is so familiar from the beginning, and it seems like he has known the other people for a long time. Are those women so stupid when they see a handsome main character? Just find a good-looking mate, right?

Not bad, keep up the good work. At present, as long as you keep giving away girls, you have the potential to become gold. However, whether the fruit has no side effects or has side effects, I suggest you mention it casually.

I think Aaron's part is very low. I'll comment a little bit in the comment area. I wrote down my thoughts and saw how the author changed them.

I came here to watch Pirates, not Fairy Tail. If you don't write about Pirates, don't use random names to mislead people.

I don't know why I always feel that the writing is not good enough. It's a matter of the protagonist's character. He always likes to let the villain finish his speech before fighting. There is also the fusion and entanglement of Longwei and Overlord colors. Moreover, the protagonist's current configuration does not require time-stop to be a general. If time-stop is used, as long as the attack power can break the defense, there will be no problem with the instant-second general, right? As for Aaron's part, in fact, it would be better to write it as passively being troubled, instead of actively helping Nami and helping her in return. For example, if the protagonist comes back the next day, the explanation given to Nami is The protagonist's face is serious, I'm going to get to know your village... In return, I will help you solve the problem, Nami persuaded. The protagonist shows his ability. It doesn't need to say the source of the ability, just the ability he just acquired. You don't want your village to be oppressed by the fishmen all the time, right? But now that I'm here, leave everything to me. No matter how bad it is, it won't be any worse, right? Then the protagonist soared into the sky, transformed into a dragon, rushed straight to Aaron's paradise, and landed in front of Aaron instantly.

That octopus, Hachi, is not a good thing. Don't give Pluto Rayleigh face. Anyway, it's still very early for the protagonist to get there.