I'm a Mage in the Dungeon

If you make three mistakes in a row, it would be wrong if you still make the same mistakes as the first two. For example, in the first book, there were problems such as the soul traveling, the main character was not laid out, the original characters took up the roles of the original characters, and his female subordinates ended up being pushed to the male god. For example, in the second book, you take the initiative to teach others skills - don't use Zhuang Zhou Mengdie, or why you want to conquer the heroine. The important thing is the result. If you can completely win the person into your hands, then it doesn't matter. But after you get married, you still think about your mother's family every day. This is pure enemy behavior. Why is Fu Di Mo so annoying? You know the results of the last book, and you also know whether readers recognize it or not. I pointed out your poisonous points in the first two books. If you still have this or similar problems in this book, then I don't think I can expect anything from you...

Author, how come the protagonist you wrote has the character of a treasure-delivery boy, a virgin, and he gave perfect skills at the beginning, but later gave people the feeling that there is no growth, especially the character and behavior, which is very childish, giving people the feeling that because he is an anime character, he is a woman.

A god-level mage practiced swordsmanship to a god-level, no wonder the mage died after lighting the divine fire.

I would like to make a suggestion, the original protagonist Bell should either be deleted or made into a girl. Don't add a beauty goddess or something like that. Of course it's just a suggestion, it's up to you how you write it.

From the beginning, the protagonist has no brains at all and gives everything to others. In my opinion, he is a waste. My rating is laji

Joined the Blue Ribbon Familia again

I just realized that you have written so many books... It is recommended to practice your writing, use dialogue and description instead of narration, find the rhythm at the beginning, introduce the first conflict as early as possible, make the setting simple and lively, and capture the reader's sense of expectation.

Can you change a few worlds? I've been writing about dungeons, Inuyasha, etc., Haven't they all been written before? There's also Devil's High School and stuff like that. Why don't you change a few worlds before you get tired of aesthetics?

The writing is a little green, but it's okay, but the setting is too complicated.

Do you need 3S every now and then? Also, what does the content you write have to do with the title of your book? When you come to the mage, you have a sword god and an alchemist. The water you wrote in the early stage is just a business article format. I went to the dungeon a few times. The rest is all about doing business, making money, practicing potions, meditating, and upgrading. What does this have to do with the earth? You might as well write an original Western fantasy mage article.