Beginning in the Wuxia World

You have too many words and they are too dense. It is best to have one sentence per paragraph and no more than forty words in one sentence. Otherwise, many people will not have the patience to read on. Especially if you start like this, you will offend many people.

I feel like there are too many words like 'Ah, oops, ugh, ho' and that makes me feel awkward.

It's awesome that I can survive three chapters with such a sense of smell, poisonous, poisonous, poisonous, poisonous, poisonous

I don't want to complain, but it's really hard to watch at this level.

What does it mean to come and find what you know well?

Commentary on Chapter 11: Visiting a Brothel in "Starting from the World of Martial Arts" written by the horizontally domineering kid.

It's so easy to come up with a pig's trotter name!

The male protagonist's name is not good, Ye Ziyi, it is easy to make people think he is Ye Ziyi, Yi Yi or something. And you have too many words in each paragraph

Don't be as messy as the last few books. There is one. The protagonist originally knew that he had traveled through time, and he knew the plot. When he saw the next 34 pictures, he forgot that he was. Travelers, follow the original work. Thinking about it this way has nothing to do with the original work. The difference.

Chapter 4: Smiling Proudly in the World of Martial Arts written by the domineering kid. Chapter review.