The Mechanicus in Japan

He was castrated?

The rewrite feels pretty good, but there are some issues. The combat power is just ridiculous. Just one of the coconuts' abilities is so exaggerated, with its independent space, ghosts, and immortality. It feels too over the top. Is this a mini-boss or a regular monster? If it's a regular monster, isn't this combat power a bit too exaggerated? And what about the protagonist's childhood sweetheart who turned to the Chaos? Was she chosen by the four gods, or has she already become a demon? If she has become a demon, how could the Emperor possibly let her go to the protagonist? If she is still a mortal, how could she withstand the indoctrination of these four guys? She is not a war general or Abaddon, so why didn't she become a Chaos Egg? And is the author trying to whitewash her? No way! Warhammer is all about extremes. Loyalty that isn't absolute is absolutely not loyal. If the author whitewashes her, it will be too painful to watch. Is this an original world or a crossover anime? So overall it's alright, but some plot holes in the world-building haven't been filled yet.

The writing is alright, but the protagonist's name is too un-Mechanical. And at the very beginning, the two main characters' names seemed so similar that it was hard to tell them apart, making it easy to get them mixed up, which was a bit unpleasant to watch. And is this a parallel world or time travel? Will we meet a male version of the emperor? And the protagonist is too humane; the host doesn't even know how to be grateful. I feel that if it were a normal-style gamer, it would be like this: after confirming that he can touch things, the host might affect his life. Then, in order to ensure their own interests, they start to coax the host into becoming brothers with them, or even more ruthlessly, to see if the soul state can be transformed into some kind of system, or into a woman, to stage a drama of the small head controlling the big head. After gaining the host's trust, the gamer helps the host make money through stock trading or other financial means. Once the money is there, the gamer starts accumulating materials and developing various advanced technologies. Then, the gamer takes control of the host at a certain point, either by capturing and brainwashing the host or by using anesthesia to prevent the host from waking up. This way, the gamer can obtain the host's body. I feel that this is the normal style of the gamer. After all, people aren't worth much in Warhammer, and this is the normal style of a tech enthusiast. Think about the Cherubim and all sorts of servants. Besides, tech enthusiasts are probably used to it, since high-level tech enthusiasts can be considered rare treasures.

Hey everyone, could you say something when you have a spare moment? I'm getting a bit bored sitting in front of the wall all day.

Not bad..