The Machine Species on a Journey Through Dimensions

The protagonist's "passerby" status is too obvious. Often, he inexplicably arrives in a world without any main plot or triggered connections, inexplicably gathers some power, and then inexplicably departs. He leaves no trace of his presence, and it's even unclear what his motivation is. The entire book is extremely confusing.

The main character has a heart, but acts as if he has no heart, so he is a malfunctioning robot. The malfunctioning robot is the strongest.

If I had to describe this article in one word, it would be: dry.

I got bored with the second volume and stopped reading. Recently, while reading Puella Magi Madoka Magica fanfiction, I came across this book again, subscribed to the entire Puella Magi Madoka Magica arc, read a few chapters, but still couldn't get into it. Seriously, how did you manage to write over a million words without any improvement, and even seem to be regressing? Is this book even for yourself? Is there really no progress whatsoever?

Not good at reading diary entries

Sigh, I'm only here for the human-machine feel. If it doesn't have that feel, I won't even bother watching. There aren't many humanoid fanfics worth watching anyway, so I have no problem with that. They're asking for too much. I just love this human-machine vibe.

After watching most of it, I can only say don't watch it. I even suspect the data is inflated. It doesn't involve any plot modifications; it's purely for time travel to copy abilities. There's no real combat or excitement. So far, all the battles feel like they're just for copying abilities, and powerful attacks like those in No Game No Life are rare. It's just not very interesting.

This book is like plain water; the plot is uneventful, there are no bad moments, but it also has no redeeming qualities. It's the kind of book that's edible, but not particularly enjoyable.

The battle descriptions feel disjointed and chaotic, sometimes requiring multiple rereads to understand. The emotional scenes are handled awkwardly, lacking a clear outline and feeling like random thoughts. While fanfiction aims to resolve unresolved issues or create connections with popular characters, the overly formulaic narrative and the fact that the characters arrive but change almost nothing is off-putting. The plot is somewhat uninteresting, and the title, "Take a Tourist," is absurd. We probably know the original plot better than you do; some readers in the comments have even suggested more engaging ways to write it, yet it still ends up being a rambling account. From the protagonist's arrival to their departure, the world remains largely unchanged.

Honestly, author, you should make some changes. Don't go into detail about fighting minor enemies; if they're two or three levels weaker than the protagonist, just mention it briefly. Simplify unnecessary psychological descriptions. It feels like Shul is constantly agonizing over the same question. Don't complicate simple thought processes. Shul is a machine armor type, not a humanoid machine. Furthermore, you're now spending half a day on a small matter, which is really discouraging. Since this is a small story, you could write about the "abnormalities" that Shul, as a machine armored character, exhibits in his daily life. Different worlds can have different proportions of the plot; even Fate has slice-of-life events. And it feels like you, author, aren't good at writing about emotions, but you're forcing them in…