Warhammer 40,000: Doom

As a novice author, I try my best to write a world with clear logic and full characters. Even though I am a fan, I will still write original and original characters. As for the previous dozen chapters, I personally think they are necessary. Thank you very much for reading the many chapters on background. But I saw that readers and friends were very controversial about the background of these dozen chapters, and even started to attack each other in the comment area. It's completely unnecessary, you can skip it if you feel you know Warhammer well. If you don't understand, you can take a look and know what happened in the first place. Even some friends who know the background have read how the author explained the fusion background. I am particularly grateful to these people. As for those who want to have fun fighting as soon as they come up, I really can't do it. You can also choose to leave without attacking other readers. Fighting is certainly very satisfying, but just like Slaanesh's ever-unsatisfied desire, it reaches a certain threshold and is looking forward to the next threshold. In addition, I am really grateful to those who understand and support the author. People in the book also have joys, sorrows and joys, and they are not just tools. Thank you all!

Actually starting to write Warhammer from the cultivation of the Primarch, I can only foresee two results: either follow the original route such as the Great Crusade and adapt it appropriately, or directly punch the four gods in the later stage. The former is very likely to be discontinued, and it is too big for most people to write. The latter is trouble-free and simple but downgrades.

Um, how can I put it this way? The title of the book makes me think that I want to read it, but the plot design after entering the book makes it difficult to keep reading. If you want to score, the foreshadowing in the first few chapters is unnecessary. You might as well just travel through time and kill everyone, then write it as a can with amnesia because the rabbit was enchanted, and then it exploded and started to develop into a macho. The macho typed out all the information and asked for it. In order to find his own identity, he later labeled the palace and asked Huang Pizi to vomit on his own. It's much better than the foreshadowing you did earlier.

Can anyone tell me when the protagonist started to regain his memory?

This should be a fanfic. The few pictures I posted include the Night Guard transformed into space warriors and the Doom Slayer piloting the Atlan mecha. If you are interested, you can check it out. However, the entire comic has more than 300 pages, of which only 118 pages are Chinese.

It's just that the writing becomes more and more complicated later on, and there is too much foreshadowing. Originally, forty or fifty chapters were enough, but the author seems to need more than 100 chapters of foreshadowing. When the emperor comes to the protagonist, it will be two to three hundred chapters later.

The early introduction is clear and concise, and the integration of Warhammer and Doom is very harmonious. I personally think it is very good.

First of all, since this is a Warhammer worldview, the main theme is Western fantasy. Try to avoid too many Chinese-style words, such as sweeping legs, tiger eyes, and Li Tang. These are all things that make people laugh. Furthermore, you should carefully handle the relationship between the protagonist and several important people around him. Your description is too abstract to have a clear and profound memory point for a certain character. Take Harlan as an example. Since you have set him up as a loyal and honorable warrior, you should pay attention to the details. As the protagonist's personal bodyguard, a man over a hundred years old should avoid doing things and attitudes that are inconsistent with his status. Since you are loyal to the planet and the king, you should have unbreakable respect for the prince. The "you" and "you" in the dialogue between the two people appear in turns, which is contrary to your setting, not to mention that they even make some dialogues and actions towards the protagonist that only brothers of the same age would have. A small amount of poison can be avoided, but a lot of poison is an eyesore. If you regard your work as a money-making tool, then everything I say is unreasonable. I wish you success.

The author said that he was burned into a relic, that is, even before it burned to embers, the donkey did not dare to rest like this. He was dragged into a small dark room without changing for a day and asked Heihe to have sex with him.

Beautiful, very good writing, smooth