Immortal Court Fengdao Biography

The writing is still good, but there are a lot of bad things about pig's feet, such as greed for money, stinginess, arrogance, greed for life, fear of death, etc., It is too numerous to write down, and I can only use one word to describe it, there are so many. . . .

The description of the protagonist is too unstable, without any awe, and always feels like I have Lei Fa and Daozu is also SB.

After the protagonist arrived at Su's house, I felt that the book was ruined. It was too strong and messy.

You must give the protagonist a funny character. This is cultivating immortality, but it is not funny.

I wrote the number of words about my cousin's water before. When my cousin went to get treatment, I wrote the number of words about the elf coming out of water.

It's not bad, it's just that I'm tired of aesthetics. At the beginning, there is a beautiful girl who is not related by blood. She cares about the protagonist (hate this kind of plot of time-traveling and accepting someone else's (physical) girlfriend without any sense of violation) and has a special physique. The protagonist teaches cultivation, and the routine is a bit annoying.

Nonsense. . . . . . . . .

The male tiger roars on the top of Huayue Mountain, the female dragon sings on the bottom of the Fusang Sea, and Huang Po understands herself and matches each other, sending her husband and wife to share the same heart. The white tiger in the West Mountain is rampant, but the green dragon in the East China Sea cannot be stopped. Catch it with both hands and fight to the death, turning it into a piece of purple gold frost. The red dragon, the black tiger, the west and the east, the four elephants intersect in the middle. You can use it since you are in trouble. Who can't succeed in using the golden elixir? The moon is only half-dark in the sky, and there are already sounds of dragons roaring and tigers roaring. It will be easy to practice hard and achieve the elixir within an hour. The illustrious golden elixir is made in one day, and the words of the ancient immortal are truly worthy of hearing. If you say nine years or three years, the payment schedule will always be postponed.

There are all the big guys from QQ... The one who reads QQ seems to be a pirate, a trembling voyeur...

Viewer in June. How well written your first two books are! Why does this book have to be about a protagonist with such a personality? Don't you think it's off-putting?