Pokemon: Bold Mouse

It's not very logical. There is a special reward for the first place. It's normal to do something secretive. Especially the protagonist's parents died, but the follow-up should have stopped. The subsequent villain's father targeted and after the son died (not killed by the protagonist), he wanted to let the protagonist be buried with him. It's too exaggerated. If you follow your logic, wouldn't the world go crazy? Today you see a genius and I want to kill him, and tomorrow he sees a genius and he wants to kill him too. It doesn't follow normal logic. Second: The conception and writing style are much worse than those of the original Poor People. The protagonist currently has too few shining points and is nothing but cautious. The concept is also lacking in excitement. In short, I think the author should reflect on where he should go. If this book is not written well, it will really fail.

Preface: I criticized the author before, and I feel a little embarrassed because of the high number of likes. After all, it is free. For this reason, I feel that I need to give something real. First: The first thing to mention about elf writing is a sense of immersion. If you want to write well and write about fire, you must be clear that your reader group knows that the majority of elves in the first three generations are the elves, so elves can be evil, but cannot be unpopular. Here, I only refer to Lada and Green Caterpillar. There are people who can write brilliantly. There is also Spring in Bi Diao. Maybe it is because I have never seen a brilliant Lada. Second: At present, the author may have borrowed ideas from other elf novels when assigning elves to the protagonist, but that is not yours. Since you said you want to write about rats, from weak to powerful, then elves must first have their own souls. The most attractive thing about Yang's Ducklings is their bond, rather than their natural aptitudes and miscellaneous things. What can I say about the initial elf Radha? It lacks the first sense of immersion I mentioned, and the second one is that the writing of your bond is mediocre, making it really unlikable. Third: The soul of elf writing for novices/old whites is actually what I said about people not having their own, cheating and pretending to be awesome. I don't comment on the protagonist's current performance, but your writing is too superficial. I can dig deeper with just two glances, such as move fusion and combo skills. Have you ever thought about it? What makes Tiantian's skills so amazing? What about transformation? Do you understand if you become me? For example, if I ask for rain and thunder, can it merge into Thunder God to help me? Doesn't this feeling of pleasure come all at once?

Come on, author, and strive to keep following

You are so young, you don't even have the idea to read it.

They are all rat elves,,, there are no poor people.

I really like the author's books, but there are few updates.

Too little! Raise 1 million words and then start reading

I really like the Pokémon fanfics written by the author. They are very well written, especially the book about poor people.

You might as well get a giant needle bee! In this way, I also believe that you will reach the top

There are three dragons on the ground, Desert Dragonfly, Biting Land Shark, and Kidder! ! ! There's no need to think about the last one.