People Are in Xianwu, There Are Small Games

The author's idea is to create the protagonist's emotional direction of hatred and unwillingness, so the plot is that the protagonist is eager for revenge and to get back the things that belong to him. It seems that the plot design is quite good, but it makes the readers have no sense of involvement! It can be seen that the author put a lot of effort into designing the plot, and the design is also very good. For example, the plot design that intersperses the three intelligence questions is very well-intentioned, but the reader does not have a sense of substitution and cannot understand what the author wants to express, or the experience is very poor! Logically speaking, the protagonist travels through the second generation of his ancestors, and faces an almost certain death due to his father's death. Then the protagonist cheats and breaks the game. At this time, the reader has a sense of immersion. How did he use the golden finger to break the game? At this time, the author should clearly explain the disadvantages of the golden finger, such as the need for external martial arts secrets, drugs, and development time, so that the subsequent plot will give readers a sense of involvement. However, the author is really eager to create the protagonist's character and promote the development of the plot, which will make the reading experience very abrupt or even poor, and this will dissuade many readers. The subsequent plot and protagonist's character are almost incompatible with the behavior and thoughts of a time traveler. The plot seems very deliberate and even half-hearted, which will once again dissuade many readers. Therefore, there is nothing wrong with the author's plot and character design, but it is not suitable for the theme of time travellers. It should be set as the protagonist goes through a lot of hardships, is reborn after death and activates the golden finger, which is more in line with the plot and character design. This is in line with the protagonist's hatred and eager revenge. This way, the reader will have a sense of substitution, and the subsequent plot will not feel inconsistent or out of place! If the theme of time travel must be written and the plot remains unchanged, then several descriptions must be modified: First, the cheat is activated at the beginning, and the defects of the cheat are described in detail, leading the protagonist to return to the gang to obtain cheats and resources, and to spend money to know what the current situation is. Secondly, the three questions for buying information must be written out first, or at least mention the back-up that the protagonist's father left for the protagonist in Zaiheifeng Village, so that it can be arranged where the protagonist will escape after obtaining the resources. Also, the plot of destroying a temple and killing five people needs to be deleted. It's so inappropriate. It's a complete act of risking one's life, and there's no reason to be so reckless. Now that we know that the person who came to meet him in Heifeng Village is the Eighteen Cavalry arranged by the protagonist's father in Heifeng Village, why bother? It is easy to arrange the connection between the protagonist and Heifeng Village reasonably. Third, there should be an overshoot or foreshadowing of the protagonist's drastic change in personality. Killing Song Laosan is obviously not enough to change the protagonist's ferocious nature. It can be arranged after the protagonist goes to find a place of evil spirits to accelerate the practice of martial arts given by Golden Finger due to time constraints (the shelter time of Black Wind Village is limited), and write it as a side effect of accelerating practice. The protagonist is affected by the martial arts and has some demonic obstacles. The grievances he cannot bear will amplify negative emotions, which is relatively reasonable. And the best thing about writing it this way is that the reader's sense of immersion will be greatly increased, which is in line with the behavior of time-travelers who rely on cheating to overcome difficulties when faced with difficulties, and there is no need to overhaul the plot.

Is it to show that the protagonist is decisive in killing and not a virgin? Arrange for a playboy who has done many evil things to play with girls from a good family, and his soul travels through him and he has no choice but to kill Song Laosan in order to survive. A modern character who died suddenly while playing a small game made him look like a cunning boss, and the scene at Tiger Roaring Camp was too baffling. It was not a pill that could break through to the sixth level, but a skill that could be practiced by multiple people. The uncle and nephew killed each other, and the kindness of raising them for more than ten years was in vain? It's okay for the protagonist to make a rapid breakthrough in cultivation, but the plot is forced to reflect the decisiveness of killing. The protagonist is an ordinary person in a modern society ruled by law who plays games to kill time. He turned into a different person in less than a month. The sudden change shocked me, but I can accept it if the time span is longer.

What a stupid plot, leaving the most loyal servant to die in his own house. If Yu Qing hadn't come to help in the middle, everyone would have died.

Why he doesn't run is the main character that I don't understand the most. He encounters two waves of assassinations in less than 3 days. Why doesn't he run? The protagonist has a 9-grade sand and his sand is all 7-grade. Shouldn't he run away after spending a wave of wool? Where can I go to the world with ten thousand taels of gold? I really can't understand the plot, and the system settings are not good either. It's too confusing. Wasn't that palm skill 2 stars at the beginning? Why is it still 1 star in the real world? The martial arts set by your author can increase the training level, and the martial arts upgrade star level in the game is separated from the reality to suppress the protagonist's level. It is very fascinating. After reading 50 chapters, I dare say that more than half of them are supporting characters and villains talking. The protagonist is like a transparent man. This book has a lot of problems. The system is too messy, there are a lot of narrations and dialogues, and the protagonist's operation is very confusing.

Why are today's novels so mediocre?

How do you say that the Jade Rakshasa who killed Lu Yao's family didn't have to die? He's jumping around so happily, what else will he write next? So being an adopted daughter is not included in the whole family? So if the protagonist openly said that he had severed ties with his father, wouldn't it mean that he would not have to die?

What kind of rubbish plot is written in Chapter 9, where you have to accept the cause and effect of your original body when you travel through time?

The writing is okay, but the author, how do you explain that pig's feet do not run away, it is just illogical, and you also explain that some people would rather die standing than kneel down, which is pig's feet. Pig's feet have golden fingers. One month reaches the sixth level, and three years of endurance is how many levels. After reading your book, how many years does it take for a pig's feet to reach the third level? If it takes two years, it will be the third level. When I read your book, it will fall apart and so will your character. If you stand and die without kneeling, there is no hope. You are a time traveler and you have a strong golden finger. Why don't you run? Even if you run, you won't kneel. You are so passionate about the novel. If it was the work of a great master ten years ago, if you want a good novel now, you must first be logical. In the end, the adopted daughter must die. Don't explain why she doesn't care about pig's feet for the sake of the gang.

The Goba written in Chapter 19 can be buried. Can the logic of your plot be passed?

After removing those parts that are prone to literary youth, and those parts that are illogical and purely for fun, I can still watch it, but I don't recommend torturing yourself like this. Because this protagonist really has no brains and no sense of logic. He has a huge fortune and a time-travel plug-in. He can become invincible in the world in just a few years. If you watch it with your brain, you will lose.