Inca Dawn
by Baiheliang
About This Novel
Modern man Hou Zhi traveled to South America. While listening to indigenous music on the street, I was suddenly transported back in time. Traveling to Siberia 20,000 years ago, he led a group of ancient ancestors across the Bering Strait and headed to the American continent to expand territory. Along the way, they not only have to face many prehistoric behemoths, but also encounter Neanderthals who are as ferocious and powerful as orcs, and Homo Flores who are as short and cunning as Hobbits... The twenty-five tribes are brothers. They follow Hou Si across the pontoon bridge to the sky. They must not forget the difficulties on the way. They distribute wheat and millet to the crowd and love each other. Brothers must not humiliate their brothers. Winter and spring will come again in the Kingdom of Heaven. --Houssi Wangge
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Official(1)Scraped 6d ago
The death of the big boss is a failure
There is a problem if you write down the leader who has the strongest support before you have the absolute right to speak. You can make him cripple, but he cannot die. Do you have an outline? I don't know if you have an outline, but you are moving too fast and too casually. The big boss is dead. How about the new boss who comes next is hindered? Of course, this is all written by you. If you want the protagonist to be the leader, it is impossible, so change this step quickly, otherwise the city may collapse. An outsider with no absolute say, even if he wears the halo of a divine envoy, but lacks prestige. You also wrote it yourself. Everyone is not very willing to completely obey the protagonist. So how are you going to solve the problem of the new leader next? If you are not the strongest, and you are not from your own clan, you cannot be the leader. If you write it yourself, readers may not accept this setting. If the new leader comes up and listens to you, then why do you want the big leader to die? Is this unnecessary? If I don't listen to you, it will be difficult every step of the way to fight against me. How can I make a difference? If you rely purely on the so-called identity of a divine messenger, you will collapse sooner or later. The issue of class struggle is unreasonable. If you want to be convincing and win over people's hearts, you must have absolute right to speak, and the protagonist obviously does not have it now. So your plot advancement is based on your own ideas. If you don't think about it, will the plot continue and be reasonable? It is easy to collapse. If the big boss is lame, then he will automatically abdicate. There is still a chance to support the protagonist as a leader, or let the new boss have the same say as the protagonist. And is it not a pity that such a powerful helper dies? Many readers like this character very much. You only considered the role of the protagonist, an important supporting role, and such a friendly teammate character with distinctive characteristics. You wrote it to death so early. If you use other characters, the acceptance rate is also low. Therefore, I advise you that the big boss cannot die and can only be disabled at most.
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Official(1)Scraped 6d ago
The death of the big boss is a failure
There is a problem if you write down the leader who has the strongest support before you have the absolute right to speak. You can make him cripple, but he cannot die. Do you have an outline? I don't know if you have an outline, but you are moving too fast and too casually. The big boss is dead. How about the new boss who comes next is hindered? Of course, this is all written by you. If you want the protagonist to be the leader, it is impossible, so change this step quickly, otherwise the city may collapse. An outsider with no absolute say, even if he wears the halo of a divine envoy, but lacks prestige. You also wrote it yourself. Everyone is not very willing to completely obey the protagonist. So how are you going to solve the problem of the new leader next? If you are not the strongest, and you are not from your own clan, you cannot be the leader. If you write it yourself, readers may not accept this setting. If the new leader comes up and listens to you, then why do you want the big leader to die? Is this unnecessary? If I don't listen to you, it will be difficult every step of the way to fight against me. How can I make a difference? If you rely purely on the so-called identity of a divine messenger, you will collapse sooner or later. The issue of class struggle is unreasonable. If you want to be convincing and win over people's hearts, you must have absolute right to speak, and the protagonist obviously does not have it now. So your plot advancement is based on your own ideas. If you don't think about it, will the plot continue and be reasonable? It is easy to collapse. If the big boss is lame, then he will automatically abdicate. There is still a chance to support the protagonist as a leader, or let the new boss have the same say as the protagonist. And is it not a pity that such a powerful helper dies? Many readers like this character very much. You only considered the role of the protagonist, an important supporting role, and such a friendly teammate character with distinctive characteristics. You wrote it to death so early. If you use other characters, the acceptance rate is also low. Therefore, I advise you that the big boss cannot die and can only be disabled at most.
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