Mystery: the Arrival of the New Black Emperor

You can appropriately reduce the dialogue, which is a bit suspicious.

After reading dozens of chapters, I really can't stand it anymore. The protagonist's character is too much like a virgin. He risked his life to help a stranger get back the money he was defrauded. The other person actually complained to their face that the 15% he charged was too high. What's even more funny is that the protagonist actually gave them back 5%. Not only did he not complain but also gave the other person advice. I was really convinced.

I haven't finished it yet and have only read Chapter 43. The character description is poor and the writing style is a bit jerky. The character description has no characteristics of the original work. If I cross out the name, I can't even tell who the character is, and it is quite different from the original work. I didn't see the sunny, beautiful, kind and polite Audrey, and the lazy and hairless Folse. I only saw a rude and featureless person, and a person who was not lazy and rude and troublesome. Hugh was okay but not strong-willed. The characters are rude and appear to be brainless. Most of the mysterious characters are polite regardless of whether they are rich or poor. This also shows that the mysterious characters are vivid and intelligent, which is particularly prominent among the brainless novels.

I still like Audrey more. I hope Audrey is the heroine and the author writes it well.

Origin Castle is the source of Klein, and the number of people attending this meeting is affected by Klein's strength. . . It was outrageous that you could summon three people directly when Klein just started. . . The content of the meeting also completely turned into the protagonist's personal show, and other people felt that they had very little role to play during this period. . . What's the protagonist's sequence? It seems that other characters' sequences were not mentioned much during this time period. . .

The protagonist is like a licking dog! How many people in Tingen have anything to do with you? Are you still going to risk your life to save others? Act like a fool

I can't stand it anymore after reading Chapter 52. That's how the Holy Mother is. At the beginning, we agreed to charge 20% of the legal fees. After we got the money back, the other party found it too expensive and said that other lawyers only charge 15%. When the protagonist arrived, he returned half of the money directly and only received 10%. It was agreed before and the other party also agreed. And if you want to say that the other party will be grateful to you after the work is completed, then not only will they not be grateful, they will also think that the price you charge is too high. Isn't this stupid?

I'm really speechless. This novel is very good. But, the author, you have too many private points, and it is also too outrageous. When did the Uncertain Mist become the one that Tianzun put back into the starry sky? It's normal to write fan fiction with some private settings, but some of your settings directly involve the underlying code of the mysterious world. For example, an old time can become a pillar by accommodating other sefirot and characteristics. Although it is a little outrageous, you can change this without any problem. However, later it is outrageous to find that the Heavenly Lord can be resurrected in the path corresponding to the Son of Chaos. There are also not only the sefirot and characteristics of the initial aggregation. One of the biggest problems is that the three pillars of God, Heavenly Lord, and the Fallen Mother Goddess have not been gathered together for so many times, as well as the essence and characteristics required for the fourth pillar. It was not gathered until this time. But if this is true, let alone the old days that were sucked to the earth, there are currently 10 known old days that are still alive outside the earth. Let's not talk about anything else, the order of the aggregation is wrong. Why was it that only the old days under the pillars were sucked to the earth before and not the pillars? Only the last pillar was sucked this time, and 4 were sucked at once. Although only 3 of them reached the earth, they happened to be the River of Eternal Darkness and the City of Disaster that can form the fourth pillar. This is very strange in itself. If it is to be washed, why not suck the Fallen Mother Goddess completely to the earth instead of sucking 2 pieces of uniqueness. Going back to Tianzun's ability to send the uncertain fog out of the earth, there is already a big problem. They were all initially gathered on the earth, but Tianzun can send the uncertain fog out of the earth. This is a problem in the first place. He can't get out himself, but he can still send one out.

1. Overall, it's okay. 2. But the protagonist is not up to par. When using the country of disorder to communicate, it is at most a relatively high-ranking person communicating with a low-ranking person. It cannot match the attitude of nobles and ordinary people, let alone humans and gods. 3. The reactions of the supporting characters are not appropriate. The first reaction of low-level extraordinary people to high-level existence is to be cautious rather than seeking profit. Mystery is a crazy world after all. 4. Moreover, knowledge is too cheap, and the protagonist adds it casually, which is completely inconsistent with the requirements. 5. There is an anomaly at the beginning. I don't know that there is a curse in my family, which is inconsistent with the knowledgeable character. However, considering the rescue of Mr. Ke and the sudden release from the crisis, the psychological instability can be reconciled.

Very good, but not enough to read. The writing is very good.