Give Some Shock to the World of Immortality

(No spoilers) The first part is pretty good. I think the author's narrative technique is top-notch, and the characterization is okay. But the story can't support this book. The rhythm in the first part is okay, there's a lot of life, and the stitching is good-looking. It's average among similar books. But when it comes to Hanwang, the core of the story can't support your narrative technique. You write Hanwang's purpose more and more in a bad way, but when the mystery is revealed, you end up doing such a stupid thing? It made me instantly feel that the protagonist of your book has become a clown, and it is full of mysteries. Even if I read it without thinking, I feel that it insults my IQ, and this feeling is getting stronger and stronger. To be honest, you can bomb the history once or twice, but you can't bomb it all the time. You also talk about how reliable Zhou Li is in this and that way. If you read too much, he will be like a licking dog. From your description, it is not that you don't know that he has no bottom line but a good brain and poor methods. It is very annoying for me to read too much. I hope the author can settle it. I think the rhythm and script of the previous book are much better than the current one. Come on.

Although abstract, it feels like something is missing, and the whole thing is a bit stereotyped. This is a bad trend. There are currently more than 600 chapters, and the frequency of laughter becomes less and less as you go to the end. I hope the author can come up with more exciting new things, which should be novel and exciting, and not just peeing and peeing. The main reason is that the same sentence pattern is used a bit too much. It is recommended to appreciate some other abstract works in your spare time. If you want to sew more, sew with core techniques, not just covering layers of leather. For example, you have introduced some sentences about magnetic fields and mentioned people with strong magnetic fields, but so far there is no real "crazy" character. It does not necessarily have to be powerful, but the character setting is close to that of a crazed guy. There is also overlap in character settings, and some classic settings are missing, such as the mouthless girl. It is recommended to set the seventh sister of Qigulu to be mouthless. She does not speak much, but chats across servers when communicating. Some words will be ignored, and some extra thoughts will be added. Then it will be very interesting to cooperate with Qimei's contrasting output of beating the gods until she falls to the mortal world.

Are you about to break it off? I hate it! ! !

It's great to read without thinking, all kinds of bad things, the author's imagination is very good, food

There is no need to consider the rationality of the plot, and there is no need to avoid the vulgarity of fun. Just be happy, even if you are wandering around in the defense. ------Adapted from "Silver Delusion Sentimental Alliance" You can live without living in this world, but you cannot live without living. Because if you are not alive, you have a reason not to live.

Generally speaking, it is not the kind of fun writing I thought of. I thought it was very strong after reading the introduction, but I didn't expect it to be developed... Okay, let's see again; it's okay to play abstractly. But there were a few points where I might have been a little stressed, so I started to report my name. The protagonist said that his name was the name of the person next to him, and the person next to him said that he was the protagonist. After seeing this too much, I felt that it was poisonous. Maybe I was too egoistic? The back part looks ordinary and has no color. If I don't have enough fun, I will feel bored or exhausted.

One secret realm after another, and every time you enter, everything will be destroyed. If you continue to drag out the main plot, several villains will have no idea how to make it up.

It's not why you have gallstones that you become a eunuch

The picture is Li Huowang! (It's from a weird fairy tale!)

A shocking and joyful novel that flows on the radio, with an ancestral protagonist, endless jokes and hooks (). This time I switched to fantasy and it seems that the writing seems to be smoother. I just hope that the author has a good rest and waits to read the capital chapter and the next one.