Mortal: Lei Xiu of the Jin Dynasty

After the foundation was established, we were stuck for 30 years, wasting 30 years. Don't you know that cultivating immortality is a race against time?

Can the author read all the comments, especially all the free chapters in front of you? If the readers give you any content that you want to modify, such as sentence errors, etc., Correct them if they are wrong. If I don't want to pay to continue watching like me several times, but I was persuaded to leave, can the author correct the problematic parts?

The timeline is as messy as a ball of yarn. What is the birthplace of Dajin? I can't figure it out. It's better than the birthplace of Tiannan. Now everyone written about Dajin is a genius among geniuses. It will be late in two or three hundred years. When Han Li arrived, there shouldn't be only two or three big cats and kittens! And now, except for the main character who has advanced in cultivation, many plots are written to match the timeline and the timeline still doesn't match up! I don't know if the author himself vomited blood after reading it! If you don't have that diamond, you have to take the porcelain job! What I wrote before is all in vain!

The four great casual cultivators of the Jin Dynasty in the original work were all hundreds of years into the late Nascent Soul stage when Han Li went to the Great Jin Dynasty. Han Li has only been in the Nascent Soul for more than two hundred years now. The protagonist and the four great casual cultivators are of the same generation. Even if the four great casual cultivators are stronger than the protagonist, they are still in the early stages of the Nascent Soul. It is hard to say whether they will reach the middle stage in two hundred years. In other words, at this point in time, at least Han Li will not be born for at least two hundred to three hundred years.

I feel like this is not a mortal fanfic, but a fairy-defying fanfic. The characteristic of mortals is resources, not the basics. With resources and magical weapons, even a dog can fight beyond the level. I have never heard of mortals using magic to fight. I am exhausted before I even start. Is there an alchemy master who doesn't even have a magical weapon? As the name suggests, the talents are mainly based on talismans. Pig script himself doesn't know how to do it. What's the difference between him and a loser?

The timelines of Dajin and Tiannan start at least 200 years apart! It makes people's scalp numb! The group of great monks in the late Nascent Soul stage in the future of the Jin Dynasty will have just formed elixirs, and the devil is invading here! Everyone has suggested it, but they have not changed it. Han Li was upgraded very quickly due to various opportunities. He was about 300 years old when Yuanzhong went to the Jin Dynasty. At that time, which of the great monks in the Jin Dynasty was not over 500 years old? ? ? The protagonist's generation of geniuses has just formed a pill, and here Han Li has already established a foundation! Is this reasonable? It was the middle stage of Nascent Soul when Lu Weiying, Nanlong Hou, and Han Li teamed up to enter the Valley of Fallen Demons (the protagonist is already in the early stages of forming a pill and is about to give birth to a baby!? The future great monks over there have just formed a pill!)

When in danger, teleport in directly, and when encountering a weak person, I punch hard? Isn't it true that a plot full of dangers and ups and downs can arouse readers' motivation to continue reading? This golden finger is too cowardly. He doesn't have the consciousness to face difficulties and break through himself. There is always a way out anyway. From the ideological point of view, he has the mentality of a weak person! Fans with low scores are all in the same situation, and the teleportation bug really beats the readers' expectations! Just imagine that the original Han Li can teleport, Douban Jiyan can teleport, Demon Slayer: Kimetsu no Yaiba Tanjiro can teleport, etc. A lot of novels and anime out of the circle have this kind of hook, will they still be so exciting! Isn't it that I'm afraid of the helplessness I felt before I lost my ability? Isn't it also a pleasure to have that kind of pressure all the time? The frustration and helplessness you feel when you are too weak, the urgent and exciting battle planning, and the slap in the face after a breakthrough can only bring pleasure!

The author forgot that there is an elixir for breaking through the Nascent Soul. The reading is bland and tasteless. The scores are fake and inflated. What he said is "off the street" and even deceives the readers. The timeline is also messed up. Other comments are also very reasonable. Although it is in Dajin, there are very few creative ideas, which are mediocre, and cultivation does not require resources. Oh oh, I will break through and prepare to receive Ying, and then I can buy high-level elixirs. It is really ridiculous (in the original work, Lei Wanhe can't cultivate Yuanying). The cultivation speed of each qualification is not mentioned (I didn't consider this aspect when I wrote it) whether to use elixirs, medicines, and where the medicines come from? No resources needed? ... Completely blank in this aspect After the protagonist breaks through the Nascent Soul, killing fellow practitioners is like slaughtering chickens and dogs, treating others as idiots.

I feel relieved when I see so many people criticizing this author. Hahaha, this author is really talented.

**Ah, how did the author come up with the idea of ​​​​time? Readers give you opinions, and you just go your own way. It's really a piece of shit. If it doesn't work, don't write it.