Industrial Cthulhu, Starting with Island Lords

Before I knew it, I had written more than three hundred chapters. Alas, I feel like there are so many pitfalls when writing a novel that I have to fall into them one by one. The previous part of Deep Sea War was written too loosely, and the narrative structure was not good - this is a word I just learned, but there is actually no rhythm. When I wrote a book before, I always thought about the whole story first and then simply wrote it out. This way I can ensure that the key nodes will not collapse and the story will not go astray. But now I find that this method of telling stories is too... Rudimentary. To put it bluntly, the only good things are those few nodes, and the middle part will be like a make-up. Then I looked for ways to tell stories online. Well, then I picked the one that seemed the most reliable and tried it. This part is an attempt. I set up a three-section crescendo structure, three independent stories that are related to each other, and then string them together to form a big climax. The first story is about entering the Blood Harbor for the first time. The prince plots against several people in Castel. The ending is that he discovers the gun as a gift and becomes a clown. The second story will completely change the image of the prince. His various actions in the turmoil will reshape this character, and at the same time, the gun at the end of the first story will be used to fire the bullet that changed the situation. I am writing this now. Of course, in the third story, the prince's portrayal will be reversed again. Then just string everything together and raise the curtain. Well, this is the current plan, let's try the effect. This is the first time I have used such a complex storytelling method, the first time I have tried to create such a complex character... I feel so brave. Forget it, even if it's just a moment of enthusiasm, we must try our best to get to the end. Everyone, the grand stage has been set. Let's see whether I make a successful curtain call or fall into the mud.

The subject matter is good, but it's a pity that the author is clumsy, wordy, and forced to sensationalize. He wrote more than ten chapters about a symbiotic race, which is simply unbearable.

It is necessary to add an idealistic world setting to the introduction, so that the protagonist's operations feel unnecessary. Anyway, the protagonist only needs to think, and there is no need to develop any industry or the like.

As long as you keep writing, you will definitely become a god.

A great book with a great subject matter and a quality that ranks high among the articles on science and technology that I have read. Disadvantages: 1: The certain Monica described is very annoying. She does wrong things without repentance. She turns around and pretends to be wronged after saying a few words. This kind of little brat should just give a beating. The protagonist written by the author is too spoiled. Oh, it is Monica who is described later. The Boiler Machine Soul Resurrection is out. While the problem was being researched, the little brat described was crying and fussing about wanting his "someone" to come back. Please, author, please don't write such a plot, or let the protagonist beat him up. In reality, even a mother who has no eyesight and cannot even recognize it. 2: The pace is a bit slow. Although I didn't pay attention when I was reading it, when I saw the latest chapter, I found that it was already more than two hundred chapters, but the story didn't feel like it had advanced much. The pace was still slow. I can accept the slow pace if the update is faster. The overall quality is really great, and I'm looking forward to the next episode. To add, I hope that the character of the protagonist can be improved a bit in the future, not just as a body, but as a part of the body. The sense of presence of the body is too low.

The start is too slow. The unfolding of industrialization is the most charming. There is no need to be verbose about other things at the beginning. Even if you want to expand the background, you cannot ignore the main line, otherwise it will appear very verbose and inexplicable.

Reading other novels gave me the impression that the evil god is the kind of indescribable, whose name cannot be known, cannot be looked at directly, or whose voice cannot be heard, otherwise people will burst into flames or turn into fanatical believers. Moreover, although the evil god controls the rules, it is not as easy as the immortal novels to destroy the world and collapse the avenue, but he can also master some weird things. Skills or mastering some rules. The worst is that it is not easy to kill an individual, and the pollution released when the evil god comes instantly calls low-level beings and turns them into puppets. When a vast vision of heaven and earth comes, those extraordinary people cannot look directly at it. The stronger ones are transformed or seriously injured, and the weaker ones are directly physically exploded. But what is the evil god written in this novel? Take the evil god born from the steam engine. It can express some ideas and communicate with each other. It is unclear. In addition to absorbing and releasing some pollution, what else can this evil god do? Take the protagonist Goldfinger as an example. At first, I thought that the protagonist was very high and belonged to the kind of alien god who descended. Then he slowly mastered the extraordinary and gradually manifested it. The protagonist's outer god personality was brought to life by the pollution of the protagonist through the construction of some machines, such as tanks, airplanes, and aircraft carriers, and he became the dependent of the outer god. But later on, he actually gave birth to the evil god himself, or absorbed the pollution to produce the evil god. I didn't look carefully at the details. I jumped to read it (because it was really boring). It was really weak, and it was extremely weak. It feels like the author wanted to sew something up but didn't grasp it well or didn't write it well. I suggest you stop calling it evil god and call it spirit instead. Linghui was born but was polluted, and the source of the pollution was the breath released by the outer god, which was the deep sea pollution that lasted for more than a thousand years. The outer god's body was in the deep sea because he was injured, so he sucked the world for healing. The breath he inadvertently released was pollution, which harmed the world for more than a thousand years. Then, whether the protagonist calls for help in the corresponding world or for other reasons, he saves the world, then opens a new map, travels to other worlds, and then descends. Here are my thoughts.

This book is about industrial science and technology. It contains many professional knowledge points. And due to the author's limited knowledge, many details are not elaborate enough. Fortunately, many book friends helped point out the mistakes, so I could write it down smoothly. After the corrected content is re-uploaded, the comments in the corrected part will automatically disappear, so I can only thank everyone for their help here. All kinds of things, it is your help that makes this book more perfect. Thank you very much for your support! ! ! ! I will continue to work hard. If you make any mistakes, please tweet me! ! ! !

I think it looks good. It looks and feels different from other types of books I have read.

The story is interesting, and the description of the banshee is quite interesting. The atmosphere of the entire island is good, but the development is too slow, and the progress is a bit slow. If it is more daily entertainment and comedy, the speed can be even slower, but after all, it is not a daily book. The rhythm is a bit draggy, but the overall look and feel is not bad.