I'm from the Continent of Arad

I've read more than 30 chapters and I can't stand it anymore. First of all, about the protagonist, he is weak. According to the author's setting, the protagonist has some sword masters and kendo masters like GSD who have been together all the time. The protagonist is also very talented, but the protagonist is still so weak after so many years? And he looks like a fool in other aspects. I don't know what the author's character settings are for the protagonist? But I think he really looks like a fool, and besides, the protagonist has been with various big shots like GSD for so many years. How can I say that his vision and knowledge will definitely be very high, so even if he really traveled to another world and came to England? He is a member of the League of Heroes, but the heroes he has come into contact with so far are not very strong in the background. He has not yet come into contact with those Ascended Ones, Star Spirits, Gods, and the like. He already behaves like a fool. Then he will be able to do it in the future. Of course, I know he must It will grow. Not to mention that GSD's teacher, the Great Priest Jig, can summon multiple entities of ghosts and gods to defeat these stars. There is no problem with gods and other things. These protagonists have been with GSD for such a long time. Does he definitely know? Then he still looks like a fool. Regarding the character's combat power and other issues, there is no way you can do this. You have to check the data and then make comparisons. Just like DNF Berserker, people can directly split the continent. How can I say that in the League of Legends universe, under the Dragon King, it is invincible on the Valoran continent? There are really big problems with characters. There are heroes like Yasuo and Yi. Their characters are completely inconsistent with their backgrounds. I think this Yasuo is like a funny guy. You have to know that Yasuo was unjustly accused of killing his master. In addition, he studied Gale is also the most talented swordsman. He is so proud in his heart. What you should write is a lonely swordsman. Even if you want to turn him into a tease, you should take a long time, at least dozens of chapters, and then slowly change. This is a question. The title, the character's character, and the portrayal of all aspects of psychology must be profound. Also, after reading these chapters, I found that the psychological changes of the characters are rarely written, or even not written at all. This is very important. If you do not write the psychological changes of the characters well, in this case, reading The book has no sense of immersion and reads like a running account. In this case, how could anyone read your book? There are also some expressions and actions of people. These are all changes in a person's mood at that time. Just like if you write about an angry person, you can write He clenched his hands into fists, his whole body was shaking uncontrollably, and his face was extremely gloomy. If you look like this, everyone will know at a glance that writing from the perspective of life will make it more engaging. To put it bluntly, the writing style needs to be improved. Some of the characters' emotions, personalities, and psychological activities are very important. This is really important. This is very important. Also, there are too few scenes for the protagonist. We are here to see the protagonist. There is no need to write too much background story about League of Legends. It is just a matter of popularizing the science when needed in certain places. Writing too much can easily make mistakes. Maybe some readers know the background better than you. Wouldn't this be embarrassing? Also, you need to be clear that as the protagonist, you need to have the aura of a gold-fingered protagonist. This is not a novel about abuse of the protagonist. The growth of the protagonist is indeed too slow. The above are all my own opinions, and there are a lot of typos. I don't know if it's your problem or mine. Finally, let me say it again, write what you want to write, don't be bound by the background of the original work, have your own thinking, and don't be afraid of those trolls. To be honest, the subject matter of this book is quite good. At least I haven't seen the second League of Legends book with DNF, so I am optimistic about you.

According to the author's setting, the plot requires a lot of imagination to write, otherwise it will be difficult to write.