Online Game: Lightning Strike Boy

You can write it down first and I'll take a look, and then we'll discuss the character's profession, etc...

Standing outside thousands of mountains, New Year's blessings are like the sound of nature. The years have changed, but my thoughts are still there. Greetings from thousands of miles away, good luck in the new year is with you, success is waiting for you, happiness is blooming for you, and the flowers of happiness are blooming undefeated.

The writing is too messy, and it takes too much effort to read. One moment, the first person calls me, the next moment, the third person calls me Yunfei, and the next moment, they all call me Yunfei. What are you writing? Can you check it before publishing? The plot is also a mess,

Could you please unify the first person and third person pronouns? It looks uncomfortable

I wish everyone a happy New Year, and be happy every day in the new year! ! Happy forever! !

I was disgusted with the setting at the beginning. The protagonist didn't have any special skills or a great family background. What kind of education and what kind of mentality? Let him be selfish, regardless of himself or his mother, and be the so-called hero who acts bravely for justice. Maybe the author wanted him to get the setting of the practical skills in the game warehouse or the introduction, but due to his poor family, his father who died young, and his life experience of being admitted to Peking University with a high IQ, a poor child would never do such a reckless and childish thing if he had already become a master. The most hateful thing is that when he was incapable of speaking or acting, when his family owed 370,000 yuan, and when his mother said you don't think about me, he actually didn't take it seriously and thought that he would do this again when encountering such a thing in the future. Because I like the storyline where the skills or props in the game are realized in reality, I endured it and watched his performance in the game. , And the result, ahem... Almost drove me crazy. Hence the above comments. Otherwise I would be really pissed off.

The author hopes that this book is not a post-official novel, but I am tired of reading the post-official version.

After seeing the first few pictures, although there is nothing noteworthy about the writing style, it is full of Peking University feelings. As a child who grew up by Weiming Lake, this book must be very good!

Damn it, you will die if you check it! How about the word count?

Come on! ! !