Naruto Tsanseigan

Author, well, your writing is pretty good, but there are two flaws. One is the dialogue between you and the protagonist. It seemed to be good at first, but suddenly the dialogue between you and the protagonist was inserted, and you felt disconnected for an instant, and you couldn't get in again. The second is your Shiranui Mai. You are so cruel. When I saw Shiranui Mai, I spit out a mouthful of milk tea. It scared me to death. Other places are pretty good, and I have just started writing. Hehe, let's encourage each other! I know that writing a book is not easy, so you don't need to worry about trolls, just be happy!

In the beginning, human beings are inherently good, and if they don't, they are bad guys; if you don't, I don't like it, so I can do what I want.

You've already brought out Mai Shiranui, why don't you bring out his brother who doesn't know how to live or die, and his brother who doesn't know how to do anything?

Knowing that my writing ability is poor, I still write

In the beginning, human beings are inherently good, and the author would be a bad guy if he didn't. If you don't, I don't like it. Let's see what you do in the future. 😚

Wrote randomly, too much nonsense, and kept trying to make up the word count

Yoho~ It's quite pretty~ No no no! It's quite beautiful~ It's just for me, haha~

Why doesn't the protagonist go to the hospital when she gives birth? ? ? ? ? Should I still use Wenba during home birth? ? ? Your mother is sick. It's strange that your mother didn't die during childbirth. The protagonist was killed by you for the plot before the fucking plot even started. Just kill him. The killing of your mother was too outrageous. How many mentally retarded people use Wen Po? Is Konoha Hospital a fool?

When you wrote this book, you didn't bring the characters into it. It always felt like you were telling the book apart from the actual objects! No sense of substitution

If the author didn't care about the word count, I would give it a high score.