Jojo's Wonderful Bread Girl

I personally feel that some of the jokes make people feel embarrassed, and the author makes people speechless in some places. And what happened to the author? Is this a mess? Originally this kind of subject matter was very attractive to me, but the author made it so that people don't know what to say. (I know that even if I write this kind of novel, I will not be better than the author, but I hope those bullies will not come to bully me. Thank you for your cooperation)

The plot is a bit bad, Da Qiao is not that wasteful, right? Naruto is a bit hardcore, Diao Ye has a good IQ, why is it here... Anyway, Diao Ye has also experienced society, and Grandma Alina also feels ******... Weird, I suggest the author read the original manga, Naruto It was almost impossible for the author to become popular in that era, and the author could consider setting a more stylish name for the protagonist. I just feel that the protagonist is out of tune with this time. After all, it has been twelve years, and there should be some changes. And the wonderful setting of this overbearing president is... I can't explain the feeling. But the description of the environment is pretty good. Generally speaking, jo chef time travel is to change the plot for a certain character, but this one is a bit written to make the protagonist omnipotent and the best in the world. You can practice more character description and psychological description. The above are suggestions, not specific. The plot can be changed, otherwise the Qiao family will have some unspeakable hard-core inheritance in the future.

I only read chapters 1 to 8, and skipped through the rest. After reading it, I personally feel... A little uncomfortable Maybe it's because I, the Dio chef, have applied too much filter to the character of Dio. In short, Dio in this article is really a bit OOC (broken personality) There are also some characters who are indeed OOC. The protagonist is also a bit too Long Aotian If you want to create a strong protagonist, you should at least do more foreshadowing in the plot, right? What's the point of investing right away? I didn't quite understand the plot, maybe it's because my understanding ability is too poor... As a writer, I would like to make a small suggestion here. Before writing an article, it is best to plan the plot a little bit, and then pay attention to the character's personality and try not to let the character's personality collapse. The collapse of the personality of the character you like will give readers a bad reading experience. After you finish writing the article, remember to revise it a little bit (?) To make the passages that are not easy to understand a little smoother, and don't dig too big a hole, otherwise it will not be filled [Sad]

What the hell is JOJO?

Cover Sakuya Taicao

After reading the first chapter... It feels like a piece of shit? ? ?

Sure enough, the substitutes will attract each other

I feel like the author is someone who is popular in Three Minutes. Although the first few pictures are crude, they are very interesting to look at and created some jokes. But the development of the subsequent plot is too butterfly, tasteless, and can't be watched.

The plot is very interesting, I hope there will be more

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