Take Players Back to Daming
by Twenty-three
About This Novel
Player's Survival Guide No. 1: How to obtain the four elements of survival-water, fire, food, and shelter-without tools. Second: How to correctly hunt pheasants, which are as big as calves, and how to deal with attacks by bobcats, which are about the same size as Siberian tigers. Third: The right steps into the Iron Age. ... Summary: As long as you survive this wave of nuclear explosions, I will admit that you are the strongest. This is the final stubbornness of a time-traveler leading the Fourth Natural Disaster in facing the fantasy version of the 12th year of Chongzhen!
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Official(44)Scraped 23d ago
I've read Chapter 42, and the protagonist's system feels useless. Many parts of the content are inexplicably vulgar.
The protagonist himself has no role, he can't do anything, and many things are described in vulgar ways (such as the scene describing iron smelting), which makes him feel very uncomfortable. The player is also a modern person and writes like a fool Players can't want women? The source of this game player is the current world, where men and women are equal. Your game only allows men and not women. In the eyes of modern people, it is sexism. Don't talk about old horses, even the Central Committee of the United States is useless.
The distant you takes root in my heart, and the lingering you makes me sober and empty.
"Mother Meng, have another bowl" "Young man, you have already drank many bowls" "But she is still here" 💔
There is no distinction between priority and secondary, the main line is a mystery
Author, don't you feel that your protagonist's presence has diminished in recent chapters? The entire story revolves around the player, and the protagonist is basically just playing tricks, and in recent chapters he has become so weak that he disappears. To be honest, as a reader, I feel that there is no need for the protagonist to exist. The supporting characters are so outstanding that they suppress the protagonist's sense of existence. You are writing a protagonist article and not a group portrait article. Please pay attention to this. Also, at the end of the first chapter, the transition is too abrupt. It is recommended to add a dividing line or something. The simple dialogue seems a bit messy. You can add some psychological activities of the protagonist, so that the connection between the dialogues will be smoother. Finally, it's just the beginning. You don't need to use character data to count the words. First, lay out the main line. I mean to bring out the main, real, clear purpose and execution method of the protagonist at this stage. This is the most important thing. By the way, your creativity is good and the logic is smooth. Please keep working hard and strive to become a god as soon as possible.
666嘤嘤嘤
Experience and experience ensure that I pass! ! !
Come on come on come on come on
Come on, come on, come on!
Is it a piece of mindless writing with a system? Is it a piece of mindless writing with a system?
Is it a stupid article that travels through time with the system?
Come on, come on, come on
Let's start a collection of names of supporting roles. It's best to bring the source.
Name is 2-4 characters, begging readers to join me
Isn't it? After all this time, I'm still the only one commenting!
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Official(44)Scraped 23d ago
I've read Chapter 42, and the protagonist's system feels useless. Many parts of the content are inexplicably vulgar.
The protagonist himself has no role, he can't do anything, and many things are described in vulgar ways (such as the scene describing iron smelting), which makes him feel very uncomfortable. The player is also a modern person and writes like a fool Players can't want women? The source of this game player is the current world, where men and women are equal. Your game only allows men and not women. In the eyes of modern people, it is sexism. Don't talk about old horses, even the Central Committee of the United States is useless.
The distant you takes root in my heart, and the lingering you makes me sober and empty.
"Mother Meng, have another bowl" "Young man, you have already drank many bowls" "But she is still here" 💔
There is no distinction between priority and secondary, the main line is a mystery
Author, don't you feel that your protagonist's presence has diminished in recent chapters? The entire story revolves around the player, and the protagonist is basically just playing tricks, and in recent chapters he has become so weak that he disappears. To be honest, as a reader, I feel that there is no need for the protagonist to exist. The supporting characters are so outstanding that they suppress the protagonist's sense of existence. You are writing a protagonist article and not a group portrait article. Please pay attention to this. Also, at the end of the first chapter, the transition is too abrupt. It is recommended to add a dividing line or something. The simple dialogue seems a bit messy. You can add some psychological activities of the protagonist, so that the connection between the dialogues will be smoother. Finally, it's just the beginning. You don't need to use character data to count the words. First, lay out the main line. I mean to bring out the main, real, clear purpose and execution method of the protagonist at this stage. This is the most important thing. By the way, your creativity is good and the logic is smooth. Please keep working hard and strive to become a god as soon as possible.
666嘤嘤嘤
Experience and experience ensure that I pass! ! !
Come on come on come on come on
Come on, come on, come on!
Is it a piece of mindless writing with a system? Is it a piece of mindless writing with a system?
Is it a stupid article that travels through time with the system?
Come on, come on, come on
Let's start a collection of names of supporting roles. It's best to bring the source.
Name is 2-4 characters, begging readers to join me
Isn't it? After all this time, I'm still the only one commenting!
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