The Heavens Begin with the Ape Strike Technique

No one, I'll be the first, first

So far, the writing is very good and the ideas are pretty good. But there are a few points. First, when writing mythology, names of people appear dozens of times in a chapter. In this case, just use one or two representative figures. It feels like a roll call in reality. Each person's name is repeated three or four times, mainly seven or eight people, three or four times. Second, the protagonist plays with women and feeds them immortality after playing with them. Does the protagonist want them to wait for countless years? Or I couldn't help but feel lonely in the middle, or I met some handsome guy in the middle, and then the protagonist was cheated. Third, how could two immortality pills be placed in the mythical world without being taken back? Even if it is risky to take them back, how could the protagonist be the original earth of the mythical world 2000 years later? Even if it is, the history of Da Qin has been changed by the protagonist, the butterfly is fluttering its wings! Furthermore, even if the protagonist returns to Earth after 2000 and discovers that the earth was a mythical world 2000 years ago and all the things he left behind are there, then the protagonist is not sure in advance, why would he do this? Basic logic, doesn't work. Last but not least, the protagonist's original Earth has too little plot, or not much at all. I don't know if this book will have a real world, or if there is any revival of spiritual energy in the real world, what is unknown, etc. But I still have to write a little bit about the protagonist's background and parents. These things have to be explained. If I write all about time travel, it will be too tiring and have a single goal.

I've seen enough stallion sex, it's shitty street stuff.

At first it was okay for the Taoist priests to go down the mountain, but by the time Shinhwa was so floating, he took three girls with him, and the hot air balloons flew into the troposphere. Do you know the temperature here? Later, I dived 100 meters with 3 tow bottles and had sex at the bottom of the sea. It's just a monkey attack technique, which is said to be able to defeat thousands of people. You can abuse Xiang Yu as you like. Good books are made by oneself, and one cannot blame others.

After the myth, there is no need to write this book again. I am a mortal, and I don't want to see anything like cultivating immortals. Cultivation of immortality. Cultivation will lead to forgetfulness and despair in the end. I would rather see the fantasy immortality. Martial arts immortality is also possible. I am a mortal. Alas, what a pity. I haven't seen this book for free yet, so I have no desire to read it.

Isn't this ape attack technique a male-male love affair? Don't you feel awkward practicing this?

The author can write about the night world

Doesn't it take a double practice with a man to learn the ape attack technique?

Do you have thousands of years of skill to fight against ten thousand? It will be exhausting to fight with you one by one in line. If you say one against a hundred, I agree. Are you a land god? Dare to fight against thousands of people. Shameless talk! Can you beat ten thousand children who are exhausted to death?

The character's character can only be said to be despicable, especially when it comes to saying that it is difficult to calm down. This is obviously because he wants to fall in love with him. I won't say more about it later. Fellow Taoists, please go and taste it carefully for yourselves.