I Am Immortal in This World

It started with poison, and the family was extremely poor. They supported the main character to practice martial arts for a year and a half. The main character has been nibbling on old age when he was not giving birth. He became a martial artist by chewing on his sister's wedding gift. He didn't tell his family but thought that he would have enough rice and meat to eat for a while, so he didn't rush out to find work. This is too selfish... The main characters in similar novels are all self-reliant and benefit their families.

Too wordy. The NPC ABCDEFG... Has to write about the same thing again, and the narrator talks back and forth in various ways, explaining some plots that do not need explanation at all, for fear that readers will not understand. But the story is just like that, a template plot. He was born in a poor family and practiced martial arts. He climbed up the ranks step by step from a small place, obtained an official position, displayed his force and obtained resources, and relied on cheats to surpass the ranks and kill the enemy. It's a pity that I first saw that the protagonist had a "Demon-Conquering Diagram" and wanted to see what was so magical about it. After following it for so long, I found that the space to write about the Demon-Conquering Diagram was simply pitiful, and it was not as good as the various shocks of the NPCs.

When you see coagulation, you don't want to see it anymore. It's like taking the college entrance examination and being admitted to Peking University. You just don't say it until school starts. Isn't this sb? The author's logic is too poor. Gone!

I'm not worried about the author's writing style. Whether it's the previous Naruto series or the following fantasy series, it's okay, but the details always feel poor. For example, in Chapter 1, the family saved money to support you in martial arts training. You have been practicing martial arts for a year and a half. Why do you still want to sleep in? It's not that you won't have such thoughts. You should wake up and extinguish the thoughts after a moment. Also, when I broke through later, I didn't tell my parents right away, so I had to pretend to be so low-key? Even if I told my parents, I could continue to pretend in front of others. Why don't you share your joy with someone who treats you well? Instead, you show off? It's very vulgar. As for my sister getting married, there is no problem. Marriage is normal, and on the surface it seems that the other party's family has good character. Later, when the protagonist becomes stronger, there will be good people nearby. It's still the same blunt pretense, which is very uncomfortable. Finally, I hope that the author will be less watery in the later stage. The last stage of the last book was really lethargic.

From the first time this author wrote a book to the present, whenever he writes about emotional lines, he writes them in an extremely disgusting way. They are all exchanges of interests and no one is sincere. I hate benefit couples who have no true feelings the most. This author is not suitable for writing emotional lines. He is suitable for writing about ruthless road without heroine and walking alone.

The author is so serious about eating books now that he forgot about the first two chapters and the last two chapters.

I just want to say something, brother, can you stop using the word water? There is no plot at all in these two pictures. Just upgrade it. Momochichi.

The author is all about water. Without refined grains, meat cannot support martial arts training. He talks about it over and over again. The protagonist is also the same, so he just pretends to be cool. The protagonist's parents are anxious about paying taxes and the protagonist is practicing martial arts. The protagonist just doesn't say that he has practiced martial arts. He insists on saying it at the end. This reflects the author's true situation, right?

The writing is okay, but a city with millions of people is like a village. How can you patrol it with just a few people? There are no high-rise buildings with a diameter of at least dozens or hundreds of kilometers.

It would be great if I didn't add the word "also" in the article. I read it and I responded.