Sequence Evolution

Born from the collective consciousness of mankind, but selecting individual strong ones Why do you think there is something wrong with this brain? Born from a civilized collective, it doesn't matter if you don't help civilization progress, but you still engage in individualism, 6 Let's change the angle Why does this thing look like an evil god? They talk about evolutionary trials one after another, but they are actually some special sacrificial rituals. Otherwise, why should some people be forcibly killed every once in a while? Where did the souls of these eliminated people go? Eaten by whom?

Hehe, my writing is not good to begin with. If you delete my comment once, I will post it once.

Joined the official organization, um, just a reminder

The subject matter is okay, but the protagonist is a bit "smart" and looks awkward. The dialogue is almost too revealing from the beginning. He is not cautious at all in his behavior. He is too independent and "lively". At first, others said that it would be better to kill level 5 and keep it mysterious. It does not require close cooperation. There is not much difference between the group's level and level 5. When the protagonist is exposed to have killed someone, he will immediately lie down. Even if you are a little kid, others won't be afraid of you. I don't understand how this kind of character could survive before, and the villain is too talkative. Do you have to add a few sentences to show the protagonist's intelligence before fighting? The more I think about it, the more awkward it becomes. Ignoring IQ and not talking about the subject matter is still very good. Just write more seriously, play jokes moderately, and don't play jokes related to the lives and interests of the players, otherwise it is a very wise behavior.

It's very good. The author updates five times a day, which is quite large.

Too many shortcomings 1. Confusing item quality system Ordinary, Rare, Excellent. After that, the quality system is confusing. I can't figure out perfect and epic, and I can't figure out legend and legend (I don't know if the author made a typo). The quality description of an item in the first part is perfect, but later it is changed to epic (yes, it's the Pillar of Six Paths). This makes it difficult for readers to distinguish your combat power system. 2. The problem of the protagonist's character 1. The description of the relationship with the country is particularly awkward and unclear. It feels like the protagonist has not thought about what to do and the protagonist has been hesitating (maybe the author wants to write about a process of psychological change, but the impression given to the reader is just ink stains) (Of course, this is a minor problem compared to point 2) 2 The protagonist is in a superposition quantum state between a smart brain and a stupid brain. The descriptions of the several battles before it was released were really good, and they knew how to use foreign objects. But there are still several battles that are triggered inexplicably, without the protagonist making any preparations (such as Seagull) (there is a beauty in triggering battles to push the plot) And knowing the battle to be fought but not preparing for it. It is good to adapt to changes in wartime, but preparation before war is more important Sometimes the protagonist sees everything, and sometimes he is confused and cannot see the situation clearly. 3. The issue of combat power mentioned in the comment area In fact, strictly speaking, it does not reduce the combat power, but due to two reasons, the protagonist's combat power is the same as not rising. 1. There are a lot of tricks for the protagonist, but the protagonist doesn't perform well. One look at the protagonist's panel and there are several tricks, but the actual combat power is not used at all (it feels like there are too many tricks and I don't know which one to describe) 2 Inexplicably difficult battles and never-ending violent comebacks It feels like the author doesn't know how to write advantageous games at all, and the protagonist is always playing in balanced games or disadvantageous games (even when a balanced game suddenly loses to a disadvantaged game, the protagonist makes a comeback) Every time you open the door, the main character of the mini-boss will be injured, and it will be difficult to separate him. I have to write a lot of descriptions. There are always higher-difficulty enemies. They were beaten before upgrading and will be beaten again after upgrading. So isn't the level up in vain? Because there is a lack of descriptions of the protagonist's high combat power and low combat power, many readers have the impression that the protagonist's combat power is suppressed. 4. Reward harvesting has always relied on combat, and lacks the benefits obtained by exploring the plot (an excellent unlimited stream should not only focus on killing to get rewards, killing to get rewards) Summary: It can be seen that the outline of the book should be good (world view, golden finger, plot...), But there are many problems in the details. None of the above-mentioned problems are major errors that can ruin a book (even if it is to suppress the combat power, I think it is due to the author's wrong details and description of the battle. Subjectively, he did not want to undermine the protagonist's combat power). However, the author's lack of writing skills and lack of attention to details have made this book difficult to return to, and it cannot be called a particularly excellent online article. The author should hone his writing skills, make the context more coherent, the details better, and have more different imaginations for the development of the story (making the novel more like a real world, now that you have just finished writing the previous step, readers can guess what you are going to write in the next step) I wish you can write works that can be called excellent as soon as possible

Personally, I feel it's pretty good. Come on, author, don't stop updating.

Personally, I feel very good. Good luck to the author.

I said Xiaochao, if you, Jiuding, don't like this piece of equipment, can you leave it to me? I am very short of long-range weapons. This hand cannon has a certain chance of triggering special effects, which is very useful to me now. " Hearing Lin Tianyi's words, Gu Xiaochao, who had never worried about thermal weapons, was obviously stunned for a moment. He said regretfully: "Brother Tian, this doesn't mean that my brother won't help you. In fact, you can really consider joining our Jiuding. With your potential, the salary you will receive will definitely not be lower than mine. "

This is pure rubbish. The main character is written with no brains and the plot is rubbish.