Escape

I have read almost all the chapters. From what point can I say that for a novice who is new to online writing, the writing style is quite acceptable, and the character design has also been worked hard to figure out. It can be seen that the author is quite attentive. However, let's talk about some of the problems in the novel. They are basically problems that novices often make. First, the author worked very hard to build the character and worked hard on the character. As I said before, it deserves praise. However, the dialogue is slightly lacking. The dialogues of the characters are spoken by different individuals, rather than simply written from the author's point of view. For example, if you want to write a character who is a gangster who has never gone to school and cannot read a few characters, but your dialogue is written in a cheerful way, this is wrong. People often say that everyone is the same. You try hard to avoid it, but the dialogue does not match his character. This is a failure. Of course, this is a minor issue that can be adjusted and improved. You can add a local way of speaking or design a representative mantra. If you feel that there is something inappropriate in the dialogue, it is recommended that you take the place of yourself, read it again, and feel that this is a normal person talking, rather than a "dead person" in the book. Second, the characters are facially profiled. The facial makeup I am talking about here is not about character, but about portrait description. You can't make all the rich men have oily faces or fat heads and big ears, and the women are all fair and beautiful. This way of description will make your characters not three-dimensional in front of the readers. Third, what I want to say is about the writing style. The author wants to express very rich emotions in the novel, such as the danger of human nature and even the tragedy when the elder brother dies. I think if you are writing, you may even have such a scene or emotion in your mind, but how you write what you want to express is very important. The author is a novice who writes for the first time, and his writing style is immature and understandable. I usually read more books, try to figure out the structure of the book or accumulate vocabulary, and see how others deal with this emotional drama when they want to write about it. Fourth, the complex is simplified, and the characters and narration that can be filtered out are not written. Readers usually choose not to see these when reading. You don't want to cover everything and tell the readers what kind of person he is. Let the readers experience it and taste it themselves. Too many character introductions, etc. Will make people feel tired. Fifth, write as little as possible about what you don't understand, or check the information before writing. I don't know what an Einstein condensate is, but if the reader happens to have studied this aspect, it will affect people's senses. At least don't make it up if you are not sure. This can be ignored, and I think the reader knows it well. For the time being, except for the third item which needs to be accumulated over time, the rest can be changed. One final word, come on! It is worthy of praise to be able to integrate the routine opening text into my own ideas later, without completely turning it into a systematic text that pretends to be x-faced. Take good care of you, don't be a eunuch, come back after you have fattened up.

Come on, come on, come on, come on (￣▽￣)

If you have a world setting you want to see, you can leave a message here, such as the Marvel Universe or others (I don't plan to write about the second dimension)

To be honest, I can't tell what's good or bad about the novel, but my heart tells me... I like this novel. What I like most is the writing style and plot.

The protagonist Wang Bo can be seen as a filial son from the beginning when he takes care of his mother to regain her composure. Moreover, the fat man Zhang Xudong is so kind to the protagonist. It can also be seen from the side that the protagonist is a very good person. Then at the end, the protagonist Wang Bo gained supernatural powers, which are the so-called super powers. In the process of obtaining superpowers, the most amazing thing is the apple, no, it should be the old woman selling the apples. Where did the old lady get this kind of apple? Every now and then, an old man gets something for the protagonist, which is very cliché in online novels. However, online articles are still like this at present, and there is nothing to do about it. The writing style is very stable, with gorgeous vocabulary, and the fighting process is also written in great detail. Moreover, the travel through various spaces and some of the plots in it make people feel passionate and high-spirited. Can the author add a female protagonist? Such a beautiful novel should have a female protagonist (personal suggestion) To be honest, this book is one of the more conscientious works in the current Internet literary world. It is not poisonous, not profligate, and not vulgar. It can be said that although the author Da Da's book has stolen some elements from other film and television works, it has written its own style. The style is very different, and the plot is ups and downs and exciting. However, I hope that Dada can speed up the update, update more and more frequently, I believe more people will notice Dada. In the novel, Dada also made me feel frightened in some scenes. Ashun's insidiousness, Kunta's emphasis on love and justice, and some descriptions of human nature are also outstanding. I hope you can support Dada! ! !

I couldn't sleep at night, so I came over and read a book. I just finished reading the first chapter, it's too late, I'll continue reading it tomorrow. The author pays great attention to the creation of characters and is very perfectionistic, so the writing is very delicate, so detailed that it made me feel like I was involved~~ I want to have a brother like Fatty. The author also complained about writing, staying up late and earning a minimum salary, so it is better to work in sales I think the foreshadowing design of the novel is very important, such as the mother-in-law who "seems normal but feels like something is wrong"... You can capture these details the first time you write, and you can look forward to the future.

The length of the article is not that big at the moment, but I take it seriously from beginning to end. After reading it once, it seems not worth mentioning. But I want to come out and prove my love for Wenwen

Can I add characters or a desired world? Is this book considered unlimited or urban?

The update speed is a bit slow, it would be nice if it could be faster. Of course, you have to follow the author's rhythm, hahahaha, I hope a Marvel world can appear.

Save it up and wait for my character to appear.