Rebirth Like a Fleeting Time

The front is actually okay, the plot development is okay, but the back is getting more and more outrageous. Things that didn't exist in 1999 are actually available in advance. I can get first and second place in the 1500-meter and 5000-meter long-distance races while talking while running. People's personalities are basically finalized after the age of 25, and then after time travel, they can become more and more childlike, etc.

I don't know what I think. In my opinion, the protagonist of a novel must at least be a character who can make people feel relaxed and happy. But some authors say they just want to make money. That's not what they say. You really write whatever you want. If you don't make the protagonist more relaxed, who will spend money to make him unhappy? Do you think readers will feel better if the protagonist is angry? I'm not very happy with what I'm watching right now. I'm not happy without complaining. The protagonist is sixteen or seventeen, and Zhang Nan, the mother-in-law, must be in her forties. You're betting that a child can change a class. Aren't you omnipotent and sweeping thousands of armies? Aren't you setting up a memorial arch? Another thing is that from the end of this book, there are only two paths, business and entertainment, right? But I think you want to be an official, and you still have the darkness above? Can you write something reliable? You don't have a golden finger, and the protagonist was not an awesome person in his previous life. He can't be that awesome in his new life. I think you are going to write about the three years of high school. Can you please stop making trouble? High school is nothing more than classes, reading, and exams. Do you think the protagonist has time for other things? What else are you training? You don't have time for fun in high school. There are only two ways to write about urban rebirth. Don't write too outrageously. If you say that the protagonist has a super high IQ and doesn't need to go to school, why are you joking about going to school? There are seven or eight classes a day, as well as evening self-study and morning self-study. How can you write about the three years of school? Isn't it nonsense? In the end, you can only pass it by in one stroke. It's better not to make the protagonist too depressing at all. Readers won't be happy with it. People who were forty years old in 1998 didn't have such advanced ideas to ask a 16-year-old child to change something. The same goes for novels. If you don't write a story that goes well, you can't write a story that's bad.

Why is there no one in the comment section for such a beautiful novel?

Maybe it's because the high school I attended is different from the author's high school. When I was in high school, I didn't have so much drama at all. I didn't have anything to express, start a business, participate in family decision-making, or lead a counterattack by the bad students. During the three years of high school, I never even left the city, and I didn't have so many rich relatives at home. I only remember getting up at 5:30 every morning and going to school at 6:00 for morning self-study. , Normal classes during the day, get out of class ends at 5:30 in the afternoon, self-study from 6:30 to 10:30, two hours of two test papers and two hours of explanation of test questions and homework, learn about the general test papers on Saturdays and Sundays, don't talk to me about happy education, ordinary third-tier cities, the kind of parents who worry about you if you don't have homework during the holidays. The protagonist written by the author feels like he is living in a drama every day, with no homework. The principal is very down-to-earth and knows everyone in the school. But we are not good. We have not known what the principal is like for three years in high school. There is no such thing as putting all the bad students in the same class. If you can't stand it, you quit, and you don't have to meet a caring class teacher like Lao Liu. Reading the author's novel, I really feel nothing, just like watching a movie. The protagonist is not only good at learning, but also very efficient, handsome, and has a rich family. The poor bad student is shivering.

This is an incredible book. Let's talk about the shortcomings first. This book is not pure, and contains a lot of personal information. It's just the author's own subjective consciousness that incorporates too much and ignores rationality. To put it bluntly, this book is about the author bragging to readers about what he would do if he went back to the early 20th century. Why do you say you are bragging? Because what the author wrote is simply not something that can be achieved by normal development after returning! ! ! First of all, let me praise you. I think it may be because of the author's age. He has a very strong sense of patriotism. Well, patriotic. Think about it, our fathers are basically like the author. Therefore, the author inevitably amplifies patriotism when writing! The proportion of patriotism exceeds the content of youth and business war, accounting for the largest proportion! ! ! This is a big no-no! If you like to write about the country, you should write about officialdom rather than businessmen. It is difficult for businessmen to influence the national level. There is a saying that when you are in your position, you must seek your own government. You are writing about a businessman, so you should do what businessmen should do! This way the story will be simple! Because you are already affecting the country, will you also affect the SARS and earthquakes in the future? How do you explain the rationality? Secondly, the protagonist you wrote was just a junior high school graduate in time, and then began to influence national decision-making in high school. It is too unreasonable. Why! There are more than one billion people in the country. Why do national leaders come to listen to your voice? So it makes no sense at all. When it comes to national content, as a reader, I cannot relate to it at all, and it even feels torn when I read it. As a result, when I came across relevant content, I always skipped the chapter directly, but when I got to the end, there were too many patriotic content! ! ! It feels like throughout the book the protagonist starts flying after high school, and starts to take it for granted. How about you just let the protagonist be the chairman! It's good to have a sense of patriotism, but what ingredients should be used in the dishes, and adding them randomly is dark cooking. Readers do not need your novel to talk about patriotism. Patriotism has special content and special textbooks. I hope the author will reflect on it

It's okay to put poor students in one classroom and one class, but the environment should be so different from other classes. In this regard, the supporting role of Zhang Nan is really bad. Because the protagonist put the poor students together alone, and said that he did not want the protagonist to be omnipotent and sweep through thousands of armies.

As an old bookworm, to be honest, the writing style, plot, etc. Of this book are not in line with my personal taste. It is relatively simple, and there are many flaws and poisonous points in the book. I will not list them all. (The most intolerable thing is that many people in the book have a "ha" modal particle when speaking. This is obviously the author's own language habits, which he unconsciously brought in during the writing process. I am a little surprised where the author is from and has this habit of speaking.) In my opinion, the highlight of this book is the author's control of the rhythm of the story, which is at least above average in the scope of online articles. Of course, this is not enough to support me in reading the entire book. What supported me in reading the complete book was the author's explanation of communication knowledge and analysis based on reality. To be honest, I benefited a lot from those things. If I were asked to read professional theoretical books and courses, I would not have the patience. And as an ordinary citizen who does not rely on those things for a living, there is no need to understand them so deeply. I think the level of what the author tells in this book is just right. To sum up, I personally think that to be a qualified Chinese netizen today, you need to have a little understanding of communication knowledge in order to view current affairs more rationally and clearly, and this book is just right: it has something, but not much (not boring), but it is just enough.

This book was very good at the beginning, really good. Although there were some flaws, the flaws were not outweighed by the flaws. However, it really started to fall apart later on. Many of the scenes that were forcibly set up for the sake of showmanship discouraged many readers, including me. Although it is a refreshing article, a book should have an overall tone, whether it is mindless and always refreshing, or whether it is a pretentious and slap-in-the-face style, whether it is a youthful freshness on campus or a domineering CEO's business empire. There must always be an overall tone. Some people like to eat sweet rice dumplings and some like to eat salty rice dumplings, but you can't attract a group of readers who like sweet food in the past and suddenly start to like salty food again after writing, because after all, the readers who were attracted to you in the first place wanted to eat sweet rice dumplings. In my opinion, the point where the book begins to collapse is when the male protagonist leads a group of brats to start an Internet cafe management organization. Let's not talk about the speed of the rise of this Internet cafe management organization, and why no one has followed suit and imitated it well, etc. After all, it is a cool article and cannot be so detailed. Let's just talk about whether a 40-year-old time traveler would mess with a group of teenagers in the stage of primitive capital accumulation. Not to mention that without the money of those children, you can't even collect two hundred thousand yuan. You are already ready to open the golden finger. Do you still care about the ten or two hundred thousand yuan? Well, it doesn't matter even if you write it like this. You have your own ideas, but suddenly donating millions to the school and suddenly going to another university to give a concert are really a bit too out-of-the-box. And then the confession scene with the parents is even more toxic. Just to reassure the parents and not to go abroad, couldn't it be said that the male protagonist is a company consultant or executive? Not to mention that your parents won't be able to accept it when your company gets bigger in the future. If you owe 10 billion, your parents will be scared. But if you make 1 trillion, your parents will only think that you are promising. After all, you don't need to tell your parents at once that you have so many companies. When you graduate from college, you can penetrate it bit by bit. And you will be an adult by then, and as you become more and more awesome in college, your parents' expectations for you will naturally increase. However, you are only 17 years old, and you tell your parents that you have a company worth hundreds of millions, and you are not planning to drop out of school. Your family is not a top wealthy family (although you are a third-generation prostitute, your family has never seen any money), and your mother is just a clerk (deputy manager). Is it consistent with national conditions and reality to just quit her job immediately to help look after your company, or to quickly arrange for a large group of relatives and friends to help you? After all, you are not in the company every day, and you rely on your semi-literate uncle to take care of you. What parents can trust? Later on, when it comes to the legend, it has completely collapsed. To put it bluntly, the legend means that it has caught up with that good era. With the combination of the male protagonist and the server technology, you can buy a game and modify it. You can play the legend and call it daddy! If you want to write a conflict, you can definitely make software and hardware after you have the funds, and in the end you will be so awesome that you can make a chip. There are some places where you can more reasonably add dramatic conflicts and pretend to be a slap in the face. Why do you have to artificially add so much difficulty to a legendary game? To put it bluntly, legendary games are the memories of a generation and have a more immersive feel. But have you considered that what you are writing is a pleasant article. You have to make it extra difficult for the male protagonist, which is to add trouble to the readers in disguise. After all, everyone has a sense of substitution. Oh, I could just lie down and make money, but I have to pass five levels and kill six generals to make money again. Isn't it annoying? Moreover, forming a combination with a group of Internet giants will completely affect the development direction of the Internet. Have you completed the accumulation of original capital? After all, you have a lot to write later, and the money will cost hundreds of billions. Having written so much, I really like the first part of this book. The author's writing skills are good. I suggest you compile an outline and start a new book. I feel like it's hard to make a big difference with this book. I hope that the author will get better and better in the future, and that his literary thoughts will flow and his financial resources will increase.

It feels like a new author has changed since it was put on the shelves. Sometimes it's like this, sometimes it's like that. I have to write everything, and everything is written very badly, as if there is no outline. The business part is even more outrageous... Is this playing house? Do you do business just by drinking beer and bragging on the side of the road?

Why can't I see the later chapters on QQ?