Douluo Jueshi: There is a Moral God in My Mind
by I Don't Know What To Name It
About This Novel
Electrolux? Tang San? Compared to me, the Supreme God of China, what can the Moral God do? ... Li Changsheng: No, who do you think you are? Daodetianzun: They all call me Taishang. You can call me Daodetianzun or Taishang Laojun. Li Changsheng: I'm so cool, can I clear the level just after traveling through time? ... Li Changsheng: No, since you are always a moral god, why did you come into my mind and suck my soul power? Moral God: Isn't this just to avoid that monkey? As for the soul power, I thought it was someone who farted, and it was purified easily! Li Changsheng: Are you presumptuous? ..... Huo Yuhao: I have a teacher, Electrolux, and I am destined to dominate the world in the future! Li Changsheng: I have one too. How about we two teachers decide who is stronger and who is weaker? Electrolux: Huh? Me? Fight with the Moral God? ... Tang San: As the God King, I should suppress all sentient beings in the lower realm! Li Changsheng: If you have anything to say, please talk to my teacher Daode Tianzun!
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There are a few small problems that I find strange. First, I feel that the protagonist is a bit mentally retarded, and many of the words are straightforward but not fluent. He feels like a powerful loser. Should he learn some skills from Laojun to cultivate his character? Secondly, are there too many female characters? Currently, all but Tang Ya are related to the male protagonist. If this continues, many characters in the future (Bingxue, Jin Yang, Ling Luochen, Xiao Xiao, etc.) Will be related. This is a clichéd plot. You can see in the original text that someone has guessed the plot before you even wrote it. Should we arrange some reasonable plots to let them die or cut off contact, and then the male protagonist will have this mentality? Combined with the mentality cultivated by self-cultivation mentioned above, this is definitely a very fresh way of writing, and it will be very interesting. The third one is too open. Laojun only shows up when Tang San is about to leave. It is recommended that ordinary life and death crises be solved by the male protagonist's own strength. These are probably the three points. In fact, it can be summarized as cultivating the mind, because no one in this place has cultivated it, and no author has written it like this. If you can really write it, it will be very competitive.
Tai Chi Diagram + Xuanhuang Pagoda + Moral Heavenly Lord, the plot of Long Aotian is too big to be played. The Tai Chi Diagram (the most innate treasure) and the Xuanhuang Pagoda (the most precious treasure of merit and virtue) can destroy the Douluo God Realm for thousands of times. They are not something that mortals who are not immortals can use. When the Moral Goddess came and directly questioned Tang Shenwang for secretly learning "Xuan Tian Gong", wouldn't that be the end of it?
The main character looks like a retard. Tai Chi Diagram and Xuan Huang Pagoda are not in Douluo Wudi
Just bragging, I don't want to criticize you, I'll be so uncomfortable that I'll die
I hope the heroine doesn't have Ma Xiaotao, if I don't like her
When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the rawness of the writing will be complained about. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates.
The first chapter is very good. I don't understand why there are Tang San fans? Haven't you read the original work of Dou Er? There is no need to say how many plot changes were made in the anime in order to whiten Tang San. Tang San himself said the ten-thousand-year plan. Tang San had always been paying attention to Huo Yuhao's path. So Dou Er is called Tang San's Dog Training Record.
Your rating of 1 point is too much for me. I see that people who are not from my race have different feelings, so I immediately want to block you. As for Huo Yuhao, Jing Hongchen directly gave it to Huo Yuhao in order to let Huo Yuhao stay in the ninth-level soul guide of the sun and moon (Jing Hongchen went to Shrek and was blackmailed by Hongchen Blessing, but it was also for Huo Yuhao)
Can any of you tell me who the heroine is? Multiple heroines or single heroine?
Do you have any three views? If a script with multiple female protagonists is considered useless, it would still be about falling in love.
At this level, you still want to be controlled by the evil fire and stab yourself. After all, you are just in love. Even if Tang San forgets it, if you still don't keep these two disgusting women away from each other and get together, you really don't know how to let me write it for you. What are these three views? Jiang Nannan, who has a good three views, doesn't want it, and still breeds horses everywhere! Do you really like Wang Dong and Ma Xiaotao's multi-female scripts so much? When writing this kind of script, just don't try to get involved with the moral god, okay? Would the Moral God be able to accept such a thing as his apprentice? Can you write?
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Official(72)Scraped 4d ago
There are a few small problems that I find strange. First, I feel that the protagonist is a bit mentally retarded, and many of the words are straightforward but not fluent. He feels like a powerful loser. Should he learn some skills from Laojun to cultivate his character? Secondly, are there too many female characters? Currently, all but Tang Ya are related to the male protagonist. If this continues, many characters in the future (Bingxue, Jin Yang, Ling Luochen, Xiao Xiao, etc.) Will be related. This is a clichéd plot. You can see in the original text that someone has guessed the plot before you even wrote it. Should we arrange some reasonable plots to let them die or cut off contact, and then the male protagonist will have this mentality? Combined with the mentality cultivated by self-cultivation mentioned above, this is definitely a very fresh way of writing, and it will be very interesting. The third one is too open. Laojun only shows up when Tang San is about to leave. It is recommended that ordinary life and death crises be solved by the male protagonist's own strength. These are probably the three points. In fact, it can be summarized as cultivating the mind, because no one in this place has cultivated it, and no author has written it like this. If you can really write it, it will be very competitive.
Tai Chi Diagram + Xuanhuang Pagoda + Moral Heavenly Lord, the plot of Long Aotian is too big to be played. The Tai Chi Diagram (the most innate treasure) and the Xuanhuang Pagoda (the most precious treasure of merit and virtue) can destroy the Douluo God Realm for thousands of times. They are not something that mortals who are not immortals can use. When the Moral Goddess came and directly questioned Tang Shenwang for secretly learning "Xuan Tian Gong", wouldn't that be the end of it?
The main character looks like a retard. Tai Chi Diagram and Xuan Huang Pagoda are not in Douluo Wudi
Just bragging, I don't want to criticize you, I'll be so uncomfortable that I'll die
I hope the heroine doesn't have Ma Xiaotao, if I don't like her
When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the rawness of the writing will be complained about. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates.
The first chapter is very good. I don't understand why there are Tang San fans? Haven't you read the original work of Dou Er? There is no need to say how many plot changes were made in the anime in order to whiten Tang San. Tang San himself said the ten-thousand-year plan. Tang San had always been paying attention to Huo Yuhao's path. So Dou Er is called Tang San's Dog Training Record.
Your rating of 1 point is too much for me. I see that people who are not from my race have different feelings, so I immediately want to block you. As for Huo Yuhao, Jing Hongchen directly gave it to Huo Yuhao in order to let Huo Yuhao stay in the ninth-level soul guide of the sun and moon (Jing Hongchen went to Shrek and was blackmailed by Hongchen Blessing, but it was also for Huo Yuhao)
Can any of you tell me who the heroine is? Multiple heroines or single heroine?
Do you have any three views? If a script with multiple female protagonists is considered useless, it would still be about falling in love.
At this level, you still want to be controlled by the evil fire and stab yourself. After all, you are just in love. Even if Tang San forgets it, if you still don't keep these two disgusting women away from each other and get together, you really don't know how to let me write it for you. What are these three views? Jiang Nannan, who has a good three views, doesn't want it, and still breeds horses everywhere! Do you really like Wang Dong and Ma Xiaotao's multi-female scripts so much? When writing this kind of script, just don't try to get involved with the moral god, okay? Would the Moral God be able to accept such a thing as his apprentice? Can you write?
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