Pluto

Ordinary time travelers know that there is a line of ruthless people in Yaoguang Holy Land, don't they all stay away from it? If you want kungfu, just go and trade with Hua Yunfei.

The running accounts are all repeated descriptions in vernacular. For example, Jiu Miao's bonus to Lun Hai must be mentioned separately for each practice. Other times of practice are also all in wheel talk. For example, how does the Taiyang Sutra affect the environment? One sentence is enough, but it has to be said three times in different ways. There are many like this. In short, when the author wants to describe a situation, he likes to describe it two or three times in different ways. Also, in the description of the black fire in the fire domain, the ability to turn back into the swallowed fire seems superfluous. Since it can be swallowed, it means that the black fire is stronger than them and there is no point in changing it. And if it is stronger than the black fire, it cannot be swallowed. As for the characteristics of different flames, you have refined and swallowed the characteristics of the other flames and your black fire will naturally have it. In short, I don't know what other use this ability has except that it can be used to water the number of words. There's also the protagonist's weapon. I'm not the only one who feels this. There are a lot of people in the comments who think like me that the protagonist's Pluto body and the stove are really incompatible, but the author just pretends not to see it. The last thing is the author's writing skills. Many places are intercepted from the original work, and it is the kind of interception that cuts off the beginning and ends. For example, the description of the Yaochi Saint in Zishan just says that Ye Fan has seen it and praised it. The whole article is written like a running account, giving people the feeling: Have you eaten? Have eaten! What to eat? Mapo tofu! The only advantage is that the author has a good conception of the plot. It is not written in a way of blaming the sky, the ground, the air, running here and there to escape opportunities, but directly under a big tree to enjoy the shade.

Then the protagonist cannot take the path of the Taiyin Sutra, which has strong adaptability or the Void Sutra.

It feels like it's always the author's perspective. No emotion at all. There is no sense of one's own Tao.

I still hope the author can think more about the balance between adventure and cultivation.

I read novels just to feel good, come on, author

The author's personal opinions in writing fan fiction are too heavy on the subject. Too much private information can easily offend readers. It is better to describe the characters more objectively based on the original work. In An Miaoyi's original novel, Ye Fan was a man, so why did he become a chicken? Even if he comes from a bad background, he can still be regarded as a pure heir.

Come on, author Come on, oil, oil, oil, oil, oil, oil

There are ruthless people in the Shaking Light Holy Land. Aren't you afraid of being swallowed up by them? In the original text, he exists as a villain.

It's pretty good-looking! The author, please come on (๑• . •๑)[Emot=default,05/]