People in Naruto: Hinata's Family Split? Just Open it Up!

Can you use your brain to write a book? Why do we need to get stamped when we are 3 or 5 years old? How can I go out without getting stamped? The clan is not safe, let alone the village? A child with a blank look and no bodyguard is ten thousand times scarier than holding money in a busy city. What kind of sectarian distinctions are being talked about every day? What is so noble about the so-called clan leader who dares not even leave the house at ordinary times? Even the son of the head of the family wants to share your sufferings and hatred? The whole family struggled to survive because of this eyesight and couldn't see it? Why did Hizashi take the place of death? To be honest, isn't it because of his eyes? Who would have thought that Byakugan is so stupid that he can use it even if he changes his x. If he were not a caged bird, he would be the target of fire regardless of whether it was a war or a mission. The key is that if you don't come to Yin Village, the senior officials of the village won't agree to it.

After listening to one or two pieces, I feel that your group is quite speechless.

The content is comparable to a leader's speech. It's all nonsense and has no practical content.

It can't live on, it can't stand up, there are no big scenes, the details are not delicate, there are many self-settings, and most of them have a low word count.

The setting is okay, but it's too watery. It's hard to see a bright spot, and then you start talking about the setting again. Moreover, after writing several chapters, your passion is worn away. In addition, there is another poisonous point that I personally think is that the protagonist is too sexy! This female character comes one after another. I can't understand why so many people like the character of Tsunade. There seem to be a lot of blond and big-breasted beauties, but many authors who write Naruto fan fiction like to conquer Tsunade, which makes me feel like you guys write Naruto fan fiction just for Tsunade. At the same time, I can't understand how the author wrote a plot about a 5-year-old child pursuing Tsunade. Maybe I'm not perverted enough to understand your otherworldly thoughts.

The writing explains very clearly why chakra is generated and how it works, and the plug-ins are also okay. But there is no story at all. The story first allows the audience to become emotionally involved, and then repeatedly rubs between breaking and preserving. And what is the logic behind unifying the ninja world and eliminating war from the very beginning? Europe was divided and the Central Plains was unified, but the number of wars was about the same. The fundamental reason for the war is not because the upper class breaks out for profit, but because the lower class feels unfair. The elimination of war has never meant unification. Are there still few uprisings among the people? Let everyone feel that it is fair and natural. Also, other than writing about the third generation of Danzo villains, you can't find a villain? The development of the story is too fragmented. For example, in the original work, the theme of the first paragraph is clearly about Naruto's world view. The second paragraph is about the bond and Zabuza, and the third paragraph is about the Chunin Exam and Sasuke, with themes and plot advancement. Set a purpose and complete it in one paragraph. Move on to the next purpose. Better ones can incorporate games between different protagonists and supporting characters, without making the audience think about the next plot development. Use writing to make the characters three-dimensional. Each character has its own purpose and story. There are reversals, climaxes, and foreshadowings. Don't break the hook. Seeing as the author is very smart and spiritual in giving suggestions, I hope the writing will get better and better. After watching half of it, I didn't want to watch anymore.

You keep writing conspiracy theories, what qualifications do you, a member of the Hyuga branch, have to let the third generation play politics with you? Wouldn't it be more in the interest of the third generation for you to grow up and overthrow the clan? It's so funny that three generations have not allowed you to grow up. The character setting is from the beginning, the third generation is the villain. The worldview in the middle and late stages is really disgusting.

It's a purely self-titled article. The protagonist's training direction is to make others think that he is the first. For this reason, he gave up Mu Dun (because he felt that no matter how hard he worked, others would not think that he was the first Mu Dun and would never be able to compare with Hashirama), and then learned it. I have the self-healing ability, and I am ready to compare my recovery ability with Tsunade who is not in the period of victory, just for the sake of being number one in the eyes of others. The first dozens of chapters are all self-pleasure, garbage among garbage, this kind of thing can be published, really everyone has it😐😐😐😐

It might be better to be more focused. First he went to Kurenai, saying that he was single-minded, and then flirted with Tsunade, telling him that poison would be better if he changed it.

I'm going, I can't stand it anymore, what the hell is this? You were already pretty good at it, and you said you were going to be flat at the beginning, but you ended up being a part of the family, and you actually went to flirt with Yuri Kurenai? It's impossible for Hinata to agree. The other families also know the problem, so why does Zhenhong agree? What's even more uncomfortable is that instead of choosing among a bunch of mythical birds, you actually choose the most rubbish one? I analyzed two whole chapters! Hyuga's chakra is pretty good. With the addition of Fire Release, it can be no weaker than Nanming's Lihuo. Do you want to listen to what you are saying? Are you actually going to dance? Shouldn't the Zong family have punished you for such a shameful thing for a noble? Wouldn't it be better to just lie down and hide?