Zhutian: Start by Scaring Away Wuhan

1. Stripes The original work of the monk said that he was 27 years old, and it can be said that he will die after the war. No matter what the reason is, of course, you may say that he is in better health, and he is forcibly rounded in order to have a happy ending, but it does not match your later protagonist. Moreover, in your writing, in the later stage of Demon Slayer, you intentionally or unintentionally downplayed the existence of the Breathing Technique. In the later period, you focused on the Juggernaut talent. Even the effects brought by the world transparency are all attributed to the Juggernaut Talent. In other words, in your perception, the level of Demon Slayer is very low. So in the second world, the protagonist who has been baptized by demon power (spiritual power) should not need to worry about the stripes. After all, the stripes are also the power brought by the Breathing Technique, and they should not continue to bring such big side effects to the protagonist. 2. The protagonist's route choice Kobayashi World, as the main world, is a world dominated by magic and gods. Although Demon Slayer is the first world, and the mainstream is swordsmanship, the protagonist in the first world relies entirely on the blessing of magic to gain a strong advantage. This is still without talent. On the premise of only elementary magic, although he has obtained the inheritance of Tsukuni Enichi in the later period. But the help of magic is indelible. The local magician family has evil intentions, and various curses emerge one after another. The writing at the beginning of the book is very good. The master should have this kind of knowledge to crush the protagonist, who is stupid, but in the later period, it completely changed. I, a mage, must face the protagonist head-on. Well, you might say, the dragon will help the protagonist, but what if the protagonist chooses to practice magic? Whether it's the provision of magic crystals, the magic to solve the problem of markings, or the blending and reconciliation of forces, the main world can dig deeper, and even the foreshadowing, the world of fallen angels can also be written. Maybe you will say that the protagonist has no talent, but wouldn't it be enough to exchange the talent of the Dharma God? Compared with swordsmanship, at the end of the first world, the protagonist can confront the guardian head-on. According to you, that one is already a very strong magician. Then you continue on this path, and the front is still the same. People are playing tricks on you, but you still have nothing to do. People play long-range magic, and you still have no way. After all, you do not have powerful demonic power in the main world, only unintegrated fighting spirit and magic power. After practicing magic, whether it is understanding Sara or surviving in the main world, it will be safer. No matter how you think about it, it is impossible for a person to give up the chance of survival in the main world and choose to develop better in the dungeon world. It can be said that when redeeming talents, it is completely forced. Because I want to write Inuyasha in the next world, so magic is not good, and I must use Sword Master. Of course, magic may be more reasonable, but the world of Inuyasha you wrote is more exciting, but in this case, it is better to delete the main world. After all, you don't really want to write about it. Don't other book friends also complain that the main world is gone? Can't we finish writing the copy world?

Awesome👏 Successfully persuaded me to quit in the first chapter

The various dungeon worlds are so long and the content is so complicated, can't they be more streamlined and simple? I feel like I have forgotten that there is an overworld!

The previous one was pretty good. I thought Inuyasha could write something new, but it turned out to be a nanny story with the subject and object reversed. Who is Inuyasha? In the original novel, he is just a grumpy teddy with no knowledge of good things. He has no ability, bad temper, irritable temper, and no self-awareness. He is almost a white-eyed wolf. My only impression of him is that Erkang stretched out his hand and barked helplessly: Ka bit! Platycodon is quite like a goddess, but it's a pity that she is someone else's woman. How much do you lick her? Never seen a goddess? ! It's still a waste of time not to touch and lick and use it as a handling fee! In this life, I despise the dog lickers who drive up the price of clams the most, so the cost of rescuing the young lady has skyrocketed according to the situation.

Come on, it feels a bit messy and boring. There is too little written about the main world, please do your best.

Boring enough and unattractive

He came in silently and went out with a speechless expression.

Starting from Wuhan, I am confused, ignorant and ignorant.

Zhu Tianliu actually calls a world a dungeon. It must be the author of the game. There may be other descriptions from other people in the future. Give Jiguoyuan a template. His natural ability is reduced, his breathing method is changed, and his strength is unknown. There is no need to cut it, you can just keep the original time limit and not worry about losing your combat power. As a result, you have to cut it several times to filter out readers. Tomioka Giyuu was sent by Demon Slayer's family, and Demon Slayer didn't catch up with him until he came down the mountain. As a result, he met him at this time. I have read even a little bit of the original work and can't stand it.

You deserve to be thrown into the street, these ten evil words