Something's Wrong with My Ninjutsu
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"The Clone Technique separates the body, and the Transformation Technique turns the body into something real. So the Substitution Technique..." Link was startled, looking at the tall and strong humanoid with blue and purple body in front of him, and murmured: "When did you come, Platinum Star?" A ninja orphan from Konoha Village who had no system, no bloodline, and was even a little late after traveling through time. After learning to release ninjutsu, he suddenly discovered that there seemed to be hundreds of millions of things wrong with his ninjutsu.
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Official(42)Scraped 20d ago
Suddenly it occurred to me that since I could take off my head, wouldn't it be possible to do it myself?
Haha, so sophisticated
Obviously, several books have been written about the interface, but in the end, I still look like a "newbie" and pick up the details, but it doesn't seem to be very detailed. The death bite setting is very stubborn. When Anbu's father never thought that he would die during the mission without leaving a few ninjutsu, he was born with a frail body and could exercise at the age of three. He recovered in a few years. At the age of three, he began to learn chakra ninjutsu knowledge and ninja skills. As long as it is a setting that can be found, it will be implemented absolutely. The classic entrance exam, ninjutsu, and graduation from the three body skills. If the chakra is exhausted, you will die. When the chakra is used, it is refined. It starts as soon as someone questions: This is the setting, this is the setting of the manga, Kishimoto said it. Let's talk about the setting. Naruto is still the son of destiny who saves the ninja world. You can't make the pig's feet stronger. After all, if you become stronger and save the ninja world, what should you do? You can't turn it into the final BOSS and let Naruto kill it. It's quite funny that you, a second-generation writer, talk about the original setting like this every day, regardless of whether it is reasonable or not.
The character of the protagonist is sensitive and entangled, hesitant and hesitant. I looked at this fan section and thought I was back in the literary version of youth pain under the banyan tree.
Disadvantages and advantages
After reading Chapter 37, there are three poisonous points ①The protagonist is very naive and will break defense because of his height ② The first contact between the protagonist and Naruto, despite the previous article repeatedly emphasizing that contact is not appropriate, was broken by Naruto as a "child", and then the contact began ③In Chapter 37, the protagonist thinks, "What will I do when there is peace in the future?" "Why not travel around the world?" But there are advantages ①The author sets the textual research very rigorously ② There are no big problems with the plot and writing (the above are basically problems with the character of the protagonist) and the plot is very smooth. ③The main character's character setting is very interesting. If you can accept the above shortcomings, I recommend you to read it. I can't stand it, especially the third one. It's really not to my liking. To sum up, goodbye everyone
Idiot
The core of the protagonist's battle is the avatar. However, in order to control the strength, the avatars summoned each time are random, and the duration is only tens of seconds, which is very expensive. What's amazing is that the author spent several chapters sorting out the protagonist's combat system, and finally came to the conclusion that he should find a few body shield teammates in front, and keep summoning a substitute from behind until he summons a powerful substitute, and then use the dozens of seconds of the substitute's existence to fight. The problem of consumption is to carry a large number of military ration pills with him and eat them while fighting.
It was all good in the beginning, with logic and planning, but when it came to Naruto, it started to feel disgusting, as if the author had changed, and the protagonist was made a little bit stupid, indecisive, too weak👎, and it didn't look good.
Very creative, average writing
It's a very novel idea. The author has also carefully studied the original work, and many bugs have been fixed. There are a lot of psychological descriptions, and the author may be very proud of his settings, and there are also many descriptions of the settings. It may also be that he wants to express that he is trying hard to look up information. He uses a lot of parentheses (these are the parentheses used in this explanation). In fact, it is completely unnecessary and will only reduce the senses. There is also a lot of content that can be written or not. For example, in Chapter 15, he researched his own abilities over and over again, and then said a whole chapter. The final conclusion he got was to find a human shield, which was quite abstract. It's not that the writing was not good, but it was too long and wordy. It is also greatly affected by comments. He kept explaining the insignificant little things and settings in parentheses at the end, which seemed very annoying. A reader taught him how to use them, and then he literally copied them all. When things got bigger later, he didn't explain. He didn't explain when it was time to explain, and Kuku explained when he shouldn't. There are also a few changes that feel weird after the changes.
At first I thought the idea was good, but then it was all a bunch of nonsense, too much psychological drama, the writing was a bit incomprehensible, and "sentiment" appeared inexplicably, I didn't know what it meant, and I was a bit dyslexic.
Less inner drama, less nonsense. Half of a chapter talks nonsense
The author is very imaginative, but the character of the protagonist is hard to describe in one sentence
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Official(42)Scraped 20d ago
Suddenly it occurred to me that since I could take off my head, wouldn't it be possible to do it myself?
Haha, so sophisticated
Obviously, several books have been written about the interface, but in the end, I still look like a "newbie" and pick up the details, but it doesn't seem to be very detailed. The death bite setting is very stubborn. When Anbu's father never thought that he would die during the mission without leaving a few ninjutsu, he was born with a frail body and could exercise at the age of three. He recovered in a few years. At the age of three, he began to learn chakra ninjutsu knowledge and ninja skills. As long as it is a setting that can be found, it will be implemented absolutely. The classic entrance exam, ninjutsu, and graduation from the three body skills. If the chakra is exhausted, you will die. When the chakra is used, it is refined. It starts as soon as someone questions: This is the setting, this is the setting of the manga, Kishimoto said it. Let's talk about the setting. Naruto is still the son of destiny who saves the ninja world. You can't make the pig's feet stronger. After all, if you become stronger and save the ninja world, what should you do? You can't turn it into the final BOSS and let Naruto kill it. It's quite funny that you, a second-generation writer, talk about the original setting like this every day, regardless of whether it is reasonable or not.
The character of the protagonist is sensitive and entangled, hesitant and hesitant. I looked at this fan section and thought I was back in the literary version of youth pain under the banyan tree.
Disadvantages and advantages
After reading Chapter 37, there are three poisonous points ①The protagonist is very naive and will break defense because of his height ② The first contact between the protagonist and Naruto, despite the previous article repeatedly emphasizing that contact is not appropriate, was broken by Naruto as a "child", and then the contact began ③In Chapter 37, the protagonist thinks, "What will I do when there is peace in the future?" "Why not travel around the world?" But there are advantages ①The author sets the textual research very rigorously ② There are no big problems with the plot and writing (the above are basically problems with the character of the protagonist) and the plot is very smooth. ③The main character's character setting is very interesting. If you can accept the above shortcomings, I recommend you to read it. I can't stand it, especially the third one. It's really not to my liking. To sum up, goodbye everyone
Idiot
The core of the protagonist's battle is the avatar. However, in order to control the strength, the avatars summoned each time are random, and the duration is only tens of seconds, which is very expensive. What's amazing is that the author spent several chapters sorting out the protagonist's combat system, and finally came to the conclusion that he should find a few body shield teammates in front, and keep summoning a substitute from behind until he summons a powerful substitute, and then use the dozens of seconds of the substitute's existence to fight. The problem of consumption is to carry a large number of military ration pills with him and eat them while fighting.
It was all good in the beginning, with logic and planning, but when it came to Naruto, it started to feel disgusting, as if the author had changed, and the protagonist was made a little bit stupid, indecisive, too weak👎, and it didn't look good.
Very creative, average writing
It's a very novel idea. The author has also carefully studied the original work, and many bugs have been fixed. There are a lot of psychological descriptions, and the author may be very proud of his settings, and there are also many descriptions of the settings. It may also be that he wants to express that he is trying hard to look up information. He uses a lot of parentheses (these are the parentheses used in this explanation). In fact, it is completely unnecessary and will only reduce the senses. There is also a lot of content that can be written or not. For example, in Chapter 15, he researched his own abilities over and over again, and then said a whole chapter. The final conclusion he got was to find a human shield, which was quite abstract. It's not that the writing was not good, but it was too long and wordy. It is also greatly affected by comments. He kept explaining the insignificant little things and settings in parentheses at the end, which seemed very annoying. A reader taught him how to use them, and then he literally copied them all. When things got bigger later, he didn't explain. He didn't explain when it was time to explain, and Kuku explained when he shouldn't. There are also a few changes that feel weird after the changes.
At first I thought the idea was good, but then it was all a bunch of nonsense, too much psychological drama, the writing was a bit incomprehensible, and "sentiment" appeared inexplicably, I didn't know what it meant, and I was a bit dyslexic.
Less inner drama, less nonsense. Half of a chapter talks nonsense
The author is very imaginative, but the character of the protagonist is hard to describe in one sentence
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There are too many Naruto fans, and not many write new ideas. This Goldfinger is a bit interesting.
Reading progress: Chapter 220 This is part of the plan Reading score: 33 points, recommended Review summary: This is a Naruto travel story that focuses on relaxation and joy. It reads quite smoothly, the plot arrangement is relatively reasonable, and it is not limited to the framework of the original work. The protagonist's golden finger is more interesting. Writing style: (6 points) The writing style in the early stage is not very mature, and there are some sentence problems, but if you don't miss the words, it will not affect the reading, and it will become very smooth in the later stage. The descriptions of daily life are very humorous, and the descriptions of battle scenes are relatively clear. The depiction of big scenes is slightly lacking, and the overall vision in important battles like the Collapse of Konoha seems a bit narrow. Character: (6 points) The protagonist himself is an original character, and his character description is that of a self-type protagonist that is common at the starting point. He is slightly arrogant and his behavior logic is self-consistent. The description of Konoha's high-level officials did not use conspiracy theories, and they also avoided falling into the BUG of the original work by minimizing contact with Naruto. I feel that it was handled well. But generally speaking, each character will become a tool around the protagonist besides their respective main plots. This can still be polished. Plot: (7 points) The plot of the novel has not yet entered Shippuden. Although it seems that the protagonist has done a lot of things and interfered with the fate of many plot characters, in fact, the main direction of the plot has not changed much. Well, as fanfic, that's a plus. It can not only satisfy the reader's sense of participation, but also not deviate from the framework of the original work, which shows that the author has a very deep understanding of the original work. Many of the short plots unfolded with the help of golden fingers in the article are very interesting and make people smile. Setting: (7 points) At present, the principle of the cheat has not been clearly explained, but the imagination, expansion, and application are all carried out well. From the interaction between the author and the readers, it can also be seen that the development of the entire cheat is clearly planned, so that people will not feel obviously abrupt or procrastinated. I respect the setting of the original work very much, and there are no magic modifications for the time being. Thought: (7 points) If you are poor, you can benefit yourself; if you are prosperous, you can help the world. Value your partners and keep striving. There is nothing wrong with being a young person's dream.
The author has a great imagination and the ninjutsu setting is very novel. In the beginning, the civilian ninja focuses on improving his strength. He talks about his companions as human shields and tools. He is physically honest, hard-spoken and soft-hearted, and has a very interesting character.
It is a super alternative Naruto fanfic. The plot and writing are first-rate, and there are no awkward points. The protagonist is my favorite type. He has goals and execution ability. There is no problem of the Mapo trying to sell someone else's dog. The inability to improve the ability is the first factor. Don't forcefully intervene in the original plot for the sake of the plot and embarrass yourself. This book is well written. Improvement is the first goal, and oneself is the most important.
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