Swallowing Starry Sky's Unconventional Upgrade

The first episode saw the Aboriginal acquisition system and I didn't want to watch it. There's no point in writing this kind of fanfic. The highlight of the fanfic is that it's cool. The author may think this way of writing about Aboriginals is very innovative, but I want to say it's really disgusting.

Also, even if you write a self-made earthling, you should get the system and practice alone, go to the universe alone, and then kill everyone on the battlefield outside the territory, and then let the humans find it and bring it back to Chaos City. You are still clinging to earth, joining various forces and schools, and you can even call it your own. Is the author out of his mind?

The words and sentences have traces of careful polishing, but because of the careful polishing, they are a bit too hard, and the plot often reads unnaturally. Some people don't like to read that the protagonist of a fanfic is not a time traveler, but from another perspective, such articles are easy to immerse in. Although there are many well-written articles, many authors are very jumpy when writing time travel articles. This is the benefit of being native and can be better immersed. Of course, from a writer's perspective, such articles are difficult to write. For example, social structure and some things about cultivation have to be explained again. Unlike the advantages of fanfiction, these things do not need to be written clearly or even at all. So when I see this setting, the author is definitely not a troublesome person. The content should be fuller and more reasonable. In some plot points in the original work, if you don't know the plot points in the original work, the protagonist will not be very abrupt when making choices. For example, Kirishima Chance, the protagonist Luo Feng, Jin The horned behemoth attack, or making some dangerous decisions, is not done because you know the result will be good, but because you don't know it will be done. If handled properly, it can make the plot more exciting. This kind of advantage is not available in time-travel novels, so this is what attracts me. Of course, it is also for this reason that many places are handled too hard. Because he is an indigenous person, he does not have a God's perspective, and he does not know what will be brought about as the speed of cultivation increases so quickly. Many problems can be solved in the most concise and simple way, but he does not know this protagonist. He will only deal with it bit by bit. But I think that the earth chapter is indeed a bit over-interpreted, such as the intrigues of the HR alliance, the feelings of family and country, especially the plot between the protagonist and the heroine. The deeper you write, the more and more you deviate from the original intention. The science fiction novel turns into an urban romance novel. I really like to write about positions, attitudes, and psychological activities. I want to become strong, but my strength is not enough; you are good to me, and my heart warms; today you are weak, and tomorrow I will be strong, etc. These descriptions are repeated and I can see that they are too hard. Sometimes I can analyze two chapters in one go. Poison Point accepted the seventeen-year-old Luo Feng as his younger brother, joining his family as a binding younger brother. Author, you have your reasons, but your reasons are reasonable for the time being, but as the protagonist Luo Feng of the original work, it is not enough to just set the protagonist to be a native and know nothing. If you are Tang San or even Naruto, that is enough, Luo Feng? Not nearly enough. I think what the author means is probably because Luo Feng's vision, including the dignity of the strong, has not been developed before he became successful. But in fact, it is equivalent to finding a job for Luo Feng. Luo Feng was confused and suspected of being willing to be a dog, but I think the author did not write it clearly. There is this suspicion, and readers all know who Luo Feng is. The sentence that the protagonist does not know is a bit deceptive. With the progress of the Earth Chapter, this relationship is actually meaningless. What can you get from Luo Feng? If you have been able to hold on, do you lack these things that Luo Feng can give, and how much can Luo Feng give? If Luo Feng goes to the battlefield outside the territory a hundred years later, will the points obtained be given to you? How long can you be bound by a contract in the Earth era? Once the contract is terminated, no matter how it is terminated, you will never be like a brother. Even if you say it on the lips, it is just the level of care you are talking about. In fact, everyone knows in their hearts why Mingjing takes care of you. Does the actual meaning mean that Luo Feng is overwhelmed? Luo Feng has always been good. Even if your cultivation speed is always faster than Luo Feng, it would be okay if you can really make a profit. There is nothing, but I feel it is a bit insulting. These things may be important to people who are mentally fragile, but Luo Feng is still not interested. Even if he has not made a fortune, I think Luo Feng has to waste a clone position and leave it to the earth's body. In the later stage, you can treat Luo Feng as very rational, but he is more serious. He may really be more serious as a subordinate. He cares about zero to one, not one and a hundred. Not everyone is the same before they become successful. They are fragile and wait for the dawn. There is no mouth, there is a mouth, but I think it is not handled well, and it is slightly poisonous. There is also a suspicion of being trapped in a cocoon. The author has a system. I think the protagonist of Luo Feng in the original work cannot use the opportunity. The author is an Aboriginal. Even if he wants to use the opportunity in the original work, he has to devise a plot for him to find it. Instead of knowing it in the first place, he can go directly to find it without any foreshadowing. It is just a spirit of vegetation from the Australian mainland. I don't know how many unreasonable plots have been foreshadowed, and it is also a fake death. It's the laser cannon again, so I moved it to the high end without analyzing or going to the high end. It won't be solved for a while. The thieves can do it. Seeing danger is like a stress reaction. I can only say that the HR Alliance family has become a mountain. Luo Feng, the invincible God of War, has disappeared for a year. Li Yao's methods can only be dealt with by a few generals. Even with the benefits of the Spirit of Plants and Trees, it is still possible. Luo Hua got out of the way, and when it came to the protagonist, he used a seemingly smart, but actually no idea, most direct method to solve the problem. He was patient, the enemy was clear, and I was safe. Even if I was asked to be a dog in name, I would do it. When asked why, just one sentence, nothing will be a problem after I become strong, and this area has become a cocoon again. You are a native, and those are far away from you. Will your cultivation speed slow down after becoming a member of parliament? You don't know anything yet, so you dare to say crudely that you will become stronger. At this time, you don't care about time, and you don't mention this crisis or that crisis. Then you would rather fake your own death in the first place, why do you just accept being treated as a dog? Isn't that a thought that has not yet formed the dignity of the strong? Did you treat yourself like a dog when you were weak? No red line? The inexplicable in-depth interpretation of the Earth chapter, the inexplicable acceleration after leaving the Earth, the biggest reason is that I used too much force in the early stage, and the setting of the Earth's indigenous people actually came out of the Earth. After participating in the Genius War, everything was not a problem, but I over-interpreted the content while on the Earth. , There are actually many plots that are constrained by this setting, and the results are not very good. Venina is given a surname and written as one of the HR family. This setting is also dispensable. Devouring only cares about the essence. It is not impossible to wither the flowers, but you must be useful.

Shouldn't we take revenge if we are being hunted? If you don't have a planetary level, you dare to boast that you are a thousand-year-old family. Didn't you know that planet-level people can live for thousands of years? In a world where force is respected, strength is the number one priority. Those operations that are not on the table can only be a struggle between ordinary people. In the world above force, if you don't have strength, no one will look at you seriously. The protagonist is a bit rubbish

It's great to watch, I hope Janet is the heroine.

There are too many mistakes❌. Has the author read the original work of Swallowing the Starry Sky?

Why do you like to be a licking dog? Some systems even add a licking protagonist.

Okay, okay, in a trance, hahahaha

Writing about the natives in Swallowing Starry Sky looks weird.

Urgent update! ! ! The author is so short, so short, so short, so short, so short, so short