Battle of Two Cities: Welcome to Zaun

I have only read about twenty chapters of this book... But I really can't help but want to say a few words! Let's talk about the writing first! I can give this book three to four stars for its writing style! The narrative aspect is a mess! ! And it's a big lump! ! If you want to write an epic story in which a protagonist with great suffering and hatred leads the people to resist! Then don't use the time traveler setting! You should write a native protagonist from Zaun! Result Good guy! You have set that the protagonist is a time traveler and knows the plot of the story, but if the whole story is full of "didn't expect", "didn't expect", "accidentally" and "why", it will greatly affect the viewing experience! The biggest failure in writing fan fiction is not being able to control the plot! Then here comes the problem! Since you want to change Zaun! So you should at least be in control of the important plot, right? You have to change the plot to advance the story! Instead of being pushed by the plot! Then wait until something goes wrong and then let go of the wail of a defeated dog! I don't deny that if I traveled through time, I would do better than the protagonist! But this is a novel! And it's fan fiction! Originally, the entire story of Two Cities was full of tragedy! You still have this idea of ​​causing suffering and enmity... I'm really convinced. Isn't your current plot the same as the original JIX plot. It's just that the protagonist has been replaced to bear the pain... Fuck! ! Really impressed! With this writing style, wouldn't it be good for you to write invincible articles? If you want to give a golden finger, be quick! ! As long as you follow the plot flow, it's fine! Good guy, you really don't want to do both? ? It looks so disgusting to me! Grass! 😎😎😎😎

There are reasons why no one is watching it. First, there are too many literary and youth plots, and the protagonist who has the advantage of being a time traveler is completely missing. Second, the pace is too slow. The prison pictures are completely redundant. If you haven't escaped in a year, what are you going to play? 60 Or so pictures haven't triggered Zaun's resistance. Third, there is no main line at all, a hammer in the east and a hammer in the west.

The writing is very good. The plot is much better than other Twin Cities novels. It has a sense of immersion. The protagonist has also grown, whether in terms of strength or character. No system is the best. I hope there can be more descriptions of the environment of Piltover and Zaan. For example, the part where the protagonist flies over the bridge is very good.

The book is written with care and has great taste, making you want to read it.

The writing is a bit immature, but the plot is okay. There are more knowledge points about the background of League of Legends, so it looks pretty good.

Renew! Renew! Renew! Love to watch

If the changes are messy, they are worse than systematic writing. There is no brain or no brain.

Now that I have read this book, I find that it is not limited to the Shuang Cities. Many Shuang Cities are not updated until halfway through and cannot be written anymore. The author's ambition can be seen in the previous content. Not bad for those who like the world view

I'm eating books😑😑, I didn't expect that Xingjid is actually Clockwork's dad🤡😷😷😷😷😷