
I'm a Mortal Selling Sex, Intercepting Hu Nangong Wan
by Selling In The World Of Cultivation
About This Novel
Ji Yin and Ji Xuan looked horrified: "Immortal old man! How could you still fight back when you were obviously poisoned?!" Old Mo Han trembled: "Brother Lin, why did Doctor Mo pull out the Tianling Root? He also formed an elixir?!" Lin Xuan smiled slightly: "Xiao Han, take the Heaven Palm Vase and farm it properly. Nangong Wan, Zi Ling, and Yuan Yao were taken away without mercy!" The starting timeline is three hundred years early? Landing in the Chaos Star Sea? Just in time to catch up with Ji Yin and Ji Yang, two traitors, plot against the master, Master Xuan Gu! Bite! [Plug-in store system] Binding! "Old monster Xuan Gu, do you want an anti-pit and anti-armor device? I'll sell you your Ji Yin Scripture and Xuan Yin Demonic Qi!" Earning ten times the critical hit back with his backhand, Lin Xuan took off on the spot, stayed in seclusion for three hundred years, and achieved the supreme Nascent Soul power! Three hundred years later, he came to Tiannanyue Kingdom through the ancient teleportation array. In the God's Hand Valley, Doctor Mo was holding a knife, preparing to bleed Han Li and seize his body. Lin Xuan kicked the door open: "Old Mo, the risk of seizing the body is too high, how about I sell you an artificial heavenly spirit root?" Since then, there has been a villain in the world of immortality who is even more outrageous than Dao Ancestor. Liu Jing's old injury relapses? Red and blue drug store hanging arrangements! Nangong Wan is in danger in the bloody forbidden area? "Wan'er, I'll sell you a [God-level detoxification device], just mortgage yourself to me!" As for Han Li? Be honest and work for me as a laborer for the ripening herbs!
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Official(8)Scraped 3h ago
标记:剧情太烂!像没带脑子一样
抢南宫婉还不如抢小绿瓶呢,风险比抢南宫婉小多了,利益也比南宫婉大
回家养猪去写的什么玩意
作者,问一下你这本书女主方面是不是全收呢?
关于这本书提点建议就是,书定位逻辑不清楚,说是爽文一点也不像,纯属恶心读者兄弟们,更别说什么无敌文,也不沾边。写作文笔水平不高,可以去借鉴或者参考原著作者书籍提升一下水平;还就是你这个外挂可以重新定义升级一下,不要搞什么卖挂,会让人感觉很拉胯,后面升级为回收万物资源系统,回收那些法器,法宝,残片以及尸体~灵石~灵矿~各种天材地宝等等,通过系统回收转换本源兑换点,可以在系统商城兑换诸天万界的各种资源就可以了,这样的话自己可以快速变强,又有用不完的资源,何必盯着主角韩立那三瓜两枣的资源,别搞这种压榨黑奴韩立这种手段来恶心我们这些读者兄弟们。不然依照你现在的情况写这本书,要不了多久就太监了,要爽文也没有爽点,纯纯的小白文➕降智文(笨蛋),这不是拿读者兄弟们当傻子,基本的写作水准逻辑框架都没有,建议作者还是多沉淀,多看看,最终核心就是爽再加点幽默风格即可。
主角搞得跟个屌丝一样,半步元婴的你就算没有心魔劫,活了三百年也该长点智商,游戏人间也不像游戏人间,元婴大能的逼格也没有,还跟一个没穿越前的穷屌丝一样,就算是个普通人活三百年也不可能这样
说真的,主角像个叼丝!修仙界看的就是尔虞我诈,主角完全没有城府!还有收南宫婉,手段太下作了!没有系统,活不过一集
那会听你们叽叽歪歪的,不过新人作者就差那几个叽叽歪歪的,有评论总好过没评论,只求别烂尾了
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Community(0)
Official(8)Scraped 3h ago
标记:剧情太烂!像没带脑子一样
抢南宫婉还不如抢小绿瓶呢,风险比抢南宫婉小多了,利益也比南宫婉大
回家养猪去写的什么玩意
作者,问一下你这本书女主方面是不是全收呢?
关于这本书提点建议就是,书定位逻辑不清楚,说是爽文一点也不像,纯属恶心读者兄弟们,更别说什么无敌文,也不沾边。写作文笔水平不高,可以去借鉴或者参考原著作者书籍提升一下水平;还就是你这个外挂可以重新定义升级一下,不要搞什么卖挂,会让人感觉很拉胯,后面升级为回收万物资源系统,回收那些法器,法宝,残片以及尸体~灵石~灵矿~各种天材地宝等等,通过系统回收转换本源兑换点,可以在系统商城兑换诸天万界的各种资源就可以了,这样的话自己可以快速变强,又有用不完的资源,何必盯着主角韩立那三瓜两枣的资源,别搞这种压榨黑奴韩立这种手段来恶心我们这些读者兄弟们。不然依照你现在的情况写这本书,要不了多久就太监了,要爽文也没有爽点,纯纯的小白文➕降智文(笨蛋),这不是拿读者兄弟们当傻子,基本的写作水准逻辑框架都没有,建议作者还是多沉淀,多看看,最终核心就是爽再加点幽默风格即可。
主角搞得跟个屌丝一样,半步元婴的你就算没有心魔劫,活了三百年也该长点智商,游戏人间也不像游戏人间,元婴大能的逼格也没有,还跟一个没穿越前的穷屌丝一样,就算是个普通人活三百年也不可能这样
说真的,主角像个叼丝!修仙界看的就是尔虞我诈,主角完全没有城府!还有收南宫婉,手段太下作了!没有系统,活不过一集
那会听你们叽叽歪歪的,不过新人作者就差那几个叽叽歪歪的,有评论总好过没评论,只求别烂尾了









