Mysterious Hunting Ground

This five-star god-level demon hunter. Say something you want to complain about-- First, where is the emotional confrontation between this time traveler and the original owner? Otherwise, don't write about this aspect. If you want to write about it, just write it well. From the beginning, I kept emphasizing that this was not my feeling, mentioning it every time I felt weird, but every time I was swayed by the original owner's feelings. This makes the protagonist look like a brainless reckless man who has been controlled by anxiety, uneasiness, fear, and anger that do not belong to him. Even if you want to show the original owner's deep feelings for Mona, there is no need to write it like this. Or, let the protagonist spontaneously feel sympathy and anger for the original owner and Mona's encounter, instead of being a clown who has been emotionally manipulated! Second, I saw Chapter 17. Why can't the protagonist believe that it was the rich second generation who did it? ! Is that rich second generation a good person? ! My blood pressure went up when I saw this description! If this rich second generation is polite, has a good reputation in school, is helpful to others, and has a good relationship with the protagonist, then the protagonist will be unbelievable. But the problem is, this rich second generation has been bullying the original owner. After the protagonist traveled through time, he even found someone with weapons and guns to mess up the protagonist's house. Moreover, if the protagonist was at home at that time, isn't it obvious what would have happened? So for this kind of villain, what's so unbelievable when the protagonist discovers that he (the rich second generation) may be the murderer who hurt Mona? ! Are you still trying to excuse him (the rich second generation) in your heart? It might just be a coincidence that his car is red and not blue. I can go to you...! Another point is that this car is blue. It was mentioned at the beginning. Although we can definitely remember it clearly after just reading a few chapters, the problem is that the protagonist in the book forgets it in just a few days? That's not how I wrote "Looking back suddenly" Really, who else is standing behind the follow-up or the rich second generation? But at the beginning, I personally felt that most readers would be able to guess that it was related to Bob when they saw the middle part, which the time-travelers would never expect... The sense of déjà vu would overflow the screen. In short, the story is cliched, the emotions are superficial, and the protagonist has no tendency to express himself. He has been manipulated by the original owner's emotions, like a brainless clown, which is very unpleasant to watch.

I have only seen a few novels written in English, which are awkward and difficult to read at all.

Rubbish, it's just a general idea, if you read it without thinking, you'll be poisoned

The problem is quite obvious. It wants to create an American atmosphere in the 1980s. English songs pop up from time to time, but the songs are obviously not well integrated with the plot. The plot of the first section was so poorly written that almost all readers could guess Mona's fate, and the protagonist had to ask silly questions, and then lost his mind. This is entirely because the author's foreshadowing is too strong and the plot is cliche. In the second part of the plot, I started to want to do a literary and public selling song, but here it becomes even more boring. I just want to make a detective fantasy flow, why do I have to have anything to do with entertainment.

Chapter 62.63 Is really poisonous. A group of classmates encountered someone while camping and wanted to attack you. The protagonist's operation is really 6. First of all, the protagonist has extraordinary abilities and can kill four attackers at will. The protagonist has to run far away to fight with a single person, and the remaining three people steal the house and control the classmates. When the classmate was at his most desperate, he came back and pretended to be a B. Then he grabbed the remaining three people and took them outside to secretly kill them all. Didn't your classmate call the police? What kind of operation is this? Either solve it outside or catch him and send him to the police station. What do you mean by this operation?

The description of the protagonist's personality is too weird. Isn't the author's writing a bit too simple? I feel that the protagonist should have the personality characteristics of a super-powerful and out-of-control protagonist. You are too boring and slap in the face. It's because the ancient plot was too young to become old.

I won't talk about the protagonist's bloodline. The FBI said that they would train the protagonist as if he were a prostitute, but the protagonist is still being treated like a dog.

When it comes to driving screws, don't blame me for speaking too harshly. It's really just like that. Go and drive the screws.

The policeman promoted the plot and persuaded me to quit The protagonist died laughing when he was a tool

From time to time, a few English songs will come out