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Can you summon this? I think this is very interesting. Then if you summon this, the earth will be stunned.

The setting is good, and the battle descriptions are also good, but fighting all the time will be a bit boring. You can write some relaxed stories, interspersed with them, for example, you went to the fourth battle and didn't go to Sakura (maybe I haven't seen it yet, but fighting all the time is really boring). The protagonist is not well portrayed, and the personality is not distinctive enough. The protagonist should have something special, such as special hobbies and special hobbies. , Only played two games before arriving at Ryunosuke Ubu) There is almost no description of the protagonist's character. It is like a plate of seafood without seasoning, it is a hard dish but there is no appetite at all. Hope it can be changed

When he was young, Lord Chong was very handsome, and his goals seemed to be justice. He had the combat power to fight against servants, and under certain circumstances, he could even defeat a single servant.

Since it is a book starting from Fate, I think it is understandable that a large number of original characters and abilities appear. However, it will not be very friendly to readers who have not read this series. However, the audience of this book is only those who love Fate, so let's not talk about it for now. When I read about the death of the Lancer, in fact, the character of the Lancer was extremely decent, and his personality charm was worth exploring. As the "old enemy" of the protagonist at this stage, I think his death was too hasty. The protagonist's character and image were not shaped very concretely through the death of the Lancer, making people feel a bit cold? It is indeed reflected, but it is also very limited. So I changed my interpretation. The author didn't want to write about this aspect in detail. Fate is just a springboard. So I think that if emotions are not the highlight, then the fighting should be excellent. But the current fighting scenes are actually not outstanding. The protagonist's ability is not well reflected. The use of lines is ok, but the fighting is really weak. I can only say that it is lucky that there is a panel. Otherwise, I don't know what the protagonist can do. A small problem? Why did the protagonist become AS? His abilities were so vague when he appeared. Although he soon had a conflict with the Lancer, he severely injured the Lancer with his traps and limited abilities... To be fair, Arthur in the original book didn't dare to play the Lancer like this, right? As he was really that strong, he wouldn't be as ham-fisted as shown in the comics. I think what makes me feel this way is still the ambiguity of combat power. In fan fiction, combat power can fluctuate greatly, but it makes sense. There are currently no toxic points or suggestions to quit. I still like this novel. I rarely write long reviews. I hope it helps.

And it makes me feel aggrieved when I look at it later, even if I can kill him, I won't kill him! Speechless

Not allowed to post comments? What do you write if you are not familiar with the original work?

The author has many unclear settings of the original work

The protagonist represents cyan, which symbolizes wealth. There's nothing wrong with that, but I feel like the protagonists are poor. It's hard to get treasure phantoms and the like, but they're either too rubbish or disposable. Is this called rich? It can be said that the protagonist has the concept of wealth, but after so many chapters, he is still not as wealthy as Gilgamesh? Starting from the Hall of Valor to sign in, it shows that there is not only the Hall of Valor, but also other worlds. Why doesn't the author let go of Xingyue? Is it good to catch a sheep? The protagonist cannot take off his mask or reveal his identity in the world of Xingyue. After one game, he will go straight to the next one without rest. The protagonist's true identity is probably a slave! Such a trap! Entering the world as a servant, the treatment is not as good as that of a reincarnation.

It's a bit unbearable, it really ruins the setting The Lock of Heaven is a Noble Phantasm of A+ level or above. How could the Yangtze River Knight be hacked?

Mysterious Curse The cloud seal is too weak, the beginning of the catastrophe. Sometimes far away, sometimes sinking or floating. Wandering in five directions, one foot away. The innocent emperor, according to the pen, is the book. First, perform the cave seal, and then write the spiritual talisman. When the Yuan Dynasty declined, the true text was born. It is obvious that it exists, but it is unknown that it does not exist. A chronic illness can heal itself, and a person who is drowned in the world can be helped. Netherworld will depend on it. This is the capital of immortality.