Celebrating More Than a Year, the Mei Family Has a Son Who Has Grown Up

Just give the antidote to your mouth first, and then give the poison to your mouth after you feel better. The character design is also unstable. I also feel that you have ideas, but I hope you can make some corrections from an objective perspective before uploading. If you grasp it well, you should be able to score 9 points.

It's very well written, keep up the good work, keep at it, don't be influenced by trolls, and don't stop updating.

I suggest you don't read it. It's really too poisonous. I couldn't stand it when my own maid licked it. I couldn't bear it when I went to a brothel to find girls. You also brought out beer and all kinds of delicious food. Are you really afraid that Fan Xian doesn't know that you are a time traveler? Also, you care about the maid better than your sister and parents. You lick women when you see them. You are only eight or nine years old and you have to behave like a middle-aged man in front of outsiders, so you are not afraid of speculation about your identity and soul. Too damn poisonous,

It shows off its IQ as soon as it is released, the eldest princess is crazy. She will take advantage of you for the rest of her life. You are putting the lives of your whole family in the hands of a crazy woman.

Overall, it's pretty good. Although there are some minor flaws, it's innocuous. It's among the top three Qing Yu Nian fanfics I've read, but it's not necessarily the third. Come on, write well💪

Why isn't it updated? It's a pity for the eunuch now

There are too many typos and the pace is too slow. Although you wrote about slow pace in the introduction, it is not such a slow approach. Being more everyday does not mean that you have to write a whole chapter about a very small thing. Have you watched "Dragon"? The Dragon Tribe is a fantasy novel about young people with passion. But if you have read it, you will know that Jiangnan's writing style is also very slow, but the slowness is very reasonable and very attractive. Of course, it is normal that Jiangnan's writing style is not as good as that, but at least you have to get closer. I I read it from the previous account, and then changed it to another account. Combined with the two accounts, I basically bought every chapter. I basically followed the update every day and bought it as soon as it was updated in the evening. But the more I read, the more I felt that I was losing money and I had no desire to continue reading. The latest one has one chapter and one picture Pancake, a chili sauce, I just wrote a chapter. This is not daily life, it is not slow, it is pure water, because it does not make readers feel funny. If you really can't write interesting daily life, you can push the plot a little bit. To be honest, this book has started to go downhill. No matter how dull the book is, there must be some passionate plot. After all, this is a time travel novel, not a food documentary or a travel diary. I suggest the author read Jiangnan's books. Jiangnan's writing style is also one of the best among the big guys.

The first part was okay, but the second part started to get messy. After Fan Xian came to Beijing, the protagonist was like air. Fan Xian was described more than the main character. What difference does it make if there is no main character in the second part?

It's beautiful (♥∀♥). Although it's just a fanfic, the writing is seasoned and charming. The rhythm is relaxed and the story is told without blindly catering to the main line of the original work. It's written in its own style and people can't help but read it in one sitting. I highly recommend everyone to read it. Don't miss it because it's a fanfic!

It's too abstract. If you change the name properly, cucumbers will come up. In the future, you will be in the fourth rank. In other places, you will be a being with one hand covering the sky. When you go to a brothel, you have to look at the look in the eyes of Sang Wen and say something like being forgiven by Sang Wen. When I returned to Mei Mansion, I was disgusted by the maid at home again. Licking a dog cannot change its nature. Being friendly to the people and licking are two different things. Don't use being close to the people as an excuse for licking.