My Cultivation of Immortality Relies Entirely on Passivity

First of all, after reading Chapter 13, I lost the desire to follow it. First, the golden finger at the beginning is not attractive enough. Since you are cheating, don't be stingy with giving powerful passives. The opening is not enough to attract readers. Second, the mistake that many novice writers make is having too many narrations, monologues, and inner dramas. There is a lack of communication between characters. It's thirteen chapters, and it can be said that it's basically all narration. In explaining this and that, various explanations. Too many narrations will not help the plot, it will only reduce points, slow down the progress of the plot, and make the plot boring. Third, the plot is a bit depressing. Under the premise that the plot is depressing, Goldfinger is not very attractive. How can it arouse readers' interest? To sum up, Goldfinger has a weak start, with too many narrations and a depressing plot, and you can only watch thirteen chapters. I don't know if the author will enter a good state in the future, but I still hope that the author can make some progress. After all, readers, especially readers who have no books to read, still want to see good new books.

I have read more than 300 chapters of this book. There are many small problems in the early stage, there is little interaction, and the plot is stilted. Of course, it's not Long Ao Tianwen after all, so the protagonist's early garbage is not a poisonous point. There are also repetitions of routines in the middle. The description seems to directly tell me that Jade Sword Holy Land is a luxurious upgraded version of Tianxing City. But the plot is gradually getting better, the protagonist is decisive in killing, and his IQ is gradually picking up. Generally speaking, it is still watchable.

No matter how deceptive your settings are, as long as the loop can be closed according to your own settings in your book, but after reading the first ten chapters, there are obvious loopholes in your author's settings, and they are even contradictory. . .

I'm afraid the protagonist is ill. He wants to be low-key in his heart, so he behaves in a high-key manner. What is he trying to do?

At the beginning. One passive for three days. He didn't explain at all the passive experience of killing people later and couldn't understand it.

There are many poisonous points and old routines. I have read more than a hundred chapters and I just can't stand it anymore.

The background setting of the book is quite good, but the author's setting of the passive skills for opening and exiting is really bad. The introduction of the skills was later changed by the author, and was forced to be weak. It's really disgusting.

His veins are damaged, his spiritual power is mottled, his heart is missing, his qualifications are average, he has been threatened by others, and he has just climbed out of a small pit and entered another big pit. Although every crisis is solved by the male protagonist, which is a bit refreshing, but the male protagonist has only a little knowledge about cultivation and has no one to lead. He looks very anxious when he looks at me. According to the cultivation level, the male protagonist should not be weak, but he has been in the Three Gu Sect. I still hope that the author can rescue the male protagonist as soon as possible.

I said that I wanted to be stubborn before, but I would be a thorn in the side when someone came, and I explained so much. To be honest, it would be better not to say it before when I wrote it like this.

Wouldn't the author explain it? Have you spent all the winning money and remembered this book?