Mixed in the Heavens, Meritorious Deeds Become Immortals

I have a golden finger and instead of practicing martial arts and cultivating immortals, I have to flirt with women in various ways. Did my brain hurt my brain when I traveled through time?

The first world was okay. Even if it's a little flawed, it's bearable. It won't work in the second world. It can be suppressed by force and the intelligence on personnel is sufficient. In this case, does it make sense for the protagonist to still play role-playing and follow the plot? ? Quickly browse through, accumulate cool points, and then the next world will be better and more attractive, right? ? Now, it's so cliché, the so-called "integration into the plot"? Others don't know, but the more I watched, the more boring it became and I slipped away.

The wording is inappropriate, and the foreshadowing of the plot is too much nonsense. The novel is like a tree. On the basis of the main plot (the main plot), you write some side plot foreshadowing or foreshadowing, but you are not asked to write nonsense. In the opening chapter, the protagonist drinks Zhen Zhibing and introduces the protagonist. Can you see if it is a bunch of nonsense? This kind of foreshadowing that introduces the identity of the protagonist should be as short as possible. After the introduction, return to the main plot, rather than too much nonsense, which has no meaning to the main plot. The people, things, and things that need to be introduced should be written in the appropriate plot, rather than writing a lot of nonsense irrelevant to the current plot. This will appear to be too poor writing. Whether it is good or not can be seen in the first two or three chapters.

There is a sense of freshness in the front, and the cool operation is okay. Tianlong is a bulldozer, which made me vomit when I was old.

It's a bit of a stud + funny + cool writing, don't read it if you don't like it, it won't affect other people's reading of the book, I support the author.

The overall work is really good, although there are some small flaws in the front, but overall it is still OK. Isn't reading novels just for fun? It's good if it can make people happy. Book friends who like to read whole life can take a look.

It's not impossible for you to accept Xiao Longnu in the future, but you can't change it in the front? The characters are all set up in the front, and I introduce myself in a long way, but then suddenly change, and suddenly I have to? You can't save your life, and your feelings will grow over time. You have to write like this, just turn it around, and think about it one by one.

Chaotic, the male protagonist doesn't mean what he says, bad review

I think it's okay. I don't know why everyone's ratings are so low. I saw some shit written by Douluo on QQ Reading and the ratings were very high. I don't understand.

The author takes a closer look, right?