Pokémon: a Journey to the Heavens Beginning with Marvel

Some places are not handled well. I can only say that the author should work hard. I saw where the vegetables are grown and now make the following comments. ① I haven't watched Demon Slayer, but I read that the author made some adjustments to the plot in the comment area. Because I haven't watched it, I can't comment on whether it's reasonable or not. However, the emotional scene between Demon Slayer and Hanashira is too blunt, and it's a clichéd and blunt plot. I'm here to watch the Pokémon post, not to see you teasing women outside. (I won't deduct stars because I haven't seen it, but I personally think it's not good, so I wrote it for everyone to see, and I can accept it and ignore it) ② There is basically no exact intimate chatting with Pokémon. If you are not a buddy, do you understand Pokémon? What about Pokémon bonds? What about the interaction between trainers and Pokémon? You can't just pick up girls when Pokémon is useful and useless, right? Rotom can understand, after all, he has several years of relationship foundation, but what about the Stingy Bee? In less than 3 months of subduing, you have become the main force of the gym. You can say that you trained it yourself, but in Demon Slayer, you are just a pick-up kid, staring at the flower column like a ghost, and you have been thrown to the butterfly ninjas since the unicorn beetle, and you only take a look from time to time. Can this giant needle bee recognize you? Qunima's, maybe, and Rotom's as well. It's there when there's a fight, it's there when there's a need, and then what? You can't see it in daily life. Is it your starting Pokémon or your starting tool? ③Performance in the challenge match with Caizhong According to people's information, you are a rookie trainer who just got a badge, and you are fighting with a turtle. Can't you explain it? Just hit it hard? After two fights, people react and take out the main force, and you say, "Although I won, I want to show my strength." It makes you feel like a victim. Isn't it disgusting? What do you think the gym competition assesses? What is being assessed is the trainer's ability, not the Pokémon's ability! Hey! Why do you have the nerve to say this? If you want to test your strength, just say it in advance. How can you have the dignity to say that you have won if someone misjudges and spanks the baby? Did you think it was playing games? And the big needle bee is also very powerful. The small fist stone that was used in the past could not be beaten. Now the main force of the vegetable attack is just one move, double needle and point. No, buddy, how advanced is Demon Slayer? He has just learned the breathing method and can beat the owner? Is it possible to become a champion with just a few more months of practice?

The word used in the Pokémon world should be adoption, not sale. You must know that Pokémon also have household registrations.

Recently, I have played the mobile game Seer Sailing. I miss the 4399 I played when I was a kid. I would like to make a small suggestion. I hope the author can add some elves from the 4399 elf games I played when I was a kid, such as Seer, Rock Kingdom, Legend of Ochi, Ora Star, etc. There is no need for top-notch super elves. Some elves are very handsome when they evolve to the later stage. I hope the author will adopt it.

To be honest, it felt like Zhulan was fine before she came out. At least the plot was relatively acceptable, but after she came out, it felt different? First of all, she appeared so unexpectedly! There are no signs at all, and after all, you are writing a Pokémon fan! Apart from the rest of the fanfic, at least the characters in the original work shouldn't have been changed so exaggeratedly, right? You make the original party look very awkward! Most of the characters that appeared before were not very important roles that you added yourself, which was fine. The appearance of Dawu is also very reasonable. At least there is nothing wrong with his character in the original work, but what about Zhulan? Why do people enter the ruins? Anyone who has read the original work will understand this. When you do it like this, you feel a sense of fragmentation, which is not to mention how awkward it looks! There is also the emergence of the Yulong clan. At least whether it is the special episode or the TV series, even in the games, Zhulan and Yulongdu do not have such a deep intersection. The most they know is the same as Dawu. How come you are related to each other? I can't understand it, it's really poisonous.

As for the content, it's not easy to say. In the early stage, the introduction of the origin of the protagonist Goldfinger was a bit vague. It appeared inexplicably, wore it inexplicably, and then suddenly came back. There was no explanation in advance about the mechanism of Goldfinger, about the essence of Pokémon training, and bonds. , Evolution, etc., Are quite average, but the idea of combining Pokémon with steel armor is quite interesting. The second time traveling is not like the first time, when you have no choice but to wear it. The protagonist ran into the woods specially, and even created a plot where he was seen by a blonde female character. It was quite difficult to deal with. And, in the Demon Slayer dungeon, Hanashira was inexplicably opposed by the members of the Demon Slayer Corps, and out of nowhere he asked the Demon Slayers to give the protagonist a trial. It was quite strange. It was clearly the Demon Slayers who wanted something from the protagonist, but in the end, the protagonist was so unqualified. Also, Hanashira's family and everyone The force they belong to is the medical department, and it is also a place with very high medical skills. Not to mention that strong people have the right to speak. How can a bunch of little Karami have the courage to criticize Zhu? Even if they dare to criticize Zhu, they still dare to point fingers at the head of a department with the highest medical level in the Demon Slayer force? Pointing fingers at doctors? Don't want to die? What's more, the current leader of the Demon Slayer Corps is very responsible in the plot. Even Tanjiro and his sister who turned into a ghost can acquiesce and persuade those Hashira who hate ghosts to let their brothers and sisters go. Even if there are people who are not clear-headed and hate Hanahashi, and there are rumors of this level, will the current leader of the Demon Slayer Corps not stop it? It's not like his head was unclear and he couldn't distinguish the importance. Generally speaking, the ideas and ideas are good, but when it comes to the plot development and some details, they are quite unsatisfactory. Maybe it is because the new author does not have much experience. There is a high probability that this book will be unreadable, but I still hope that the author can take some responsibility and finish the book well. Having the experience of this book, I will I've gone over it once, and become more familiar with the plot concept. I may grow a lot in the next book. If I can reflect and summarize it while writing this book, then I can definitely say that the future is promising. After all, other things can be practiced slowly. The brainstorming and inspiration aspect is more about talent. I look forward to the author's future works.

Did the protagonist's parents disappear because of the llama, and then regain their memory and nothing happened? If you don't get it back, will it be written to death or what to say? .

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I can't understand. If you want to write an emotional drama, focus on emotions. If you want to write about time travel, write more time travel plots. Make it the same as the Anti-Japanese War drama, with espionage and love, war and love, and heroic sacrifice and love? Can't grasp the theme?

No, the highlight of your book shouldn't be to continuously become stronger through time travel, interact with the characters in some familiar worlds, and obtain special abilities for Pokémon in each world. Why is it related to Zhulan again later, and the creation gods are here? Are you progressing too fast? How to write later. Zhulan's appearance is a real failure. She can't appear so early, and her combat power collapses too quickly. The first part is good, but why is she messing up later

G, I'm a eunuch, it's a good idea, but it's a pity