Douluo: Wuhunluo Sanpao? I Am the Black Dragon Emperor

When I saw the entanglement with Bibi Dong, I knew it was another fanfic ruined by the love story. The front was fine, but if Bibi Dong was forced to come in, it would be like a piece of mouse droppings, ruining the whole pot of porridge. Slip away.

What Qian Renji did in the later period was too fake. In the early stage, Qian Renji raised Bibi Dong as his daughter. Later, something like Yu Xiaogang happened and he wanted to elope before doing such a thing. What you wrote seems to be for Bibi Dong's body from the beginning. You have to know that there is a Qian Renji behind him. Daoliu, why did Qian Daoliu let Qian Renji do that kind of thing in the original book? It wasn't because Bibi Dong was about to run away that he just let it go. Even so, he still felt guilty. Otherwise, do you think Bibi Dong could kill Qian Renji under his nose?

Liu Erlong, no one dares to mess with the illegitimate daughter of the second head of the family. The male protagonist, the illegitimate son of the contemporary patriarch is worse than a dog. The author claims to be logical, but actually does a lot of inexplicable operations.

Isn't it okay to leave the Tyrannosaurus Rex family in an ordinary way? If you insist on writing disgusting plots, you are just a six-year-old ant! Are you still pretending to call Huang Chao a husband? The threshold for writing novels is too low

The timeline is particularly confusing. Yu Xiaogang is the same age as the protagonist. In the original work, Yu Xiaogang is one or two years older than Bibi Dong, but here Yu Xiaogang is one or two years younger than Bibi Dong. Also, Bibi Dong's level is 18 in the original work, and he became the Soul Emperor when he was 9 years old. But here, Bibi Dong is only level 39 at the age of 16, so how can he be promoted to level 20 or above? There is also Dugu Xin. In Douluo Continent, dragons are all Western dragons. Even if a snake evolves, it will only transform into a dragon first. How can it be possible to directly evolve from a snake into a Western dragon? There is also the protagonist's third ring of ten thousand years. Before Tang San absorbed the ten thousand year soul ring in the fourth ring, not only did he absorb the See Through Autumn Water Dew, but he also began to practice the Purple Demon Eyes when he was a child and exercised his mental power since he was a child. This also made him almost die when he absorbed the fourth ring of the ten thousand year soul ring. And the protagonist I haven't exercised my mental power. I only absorbed one Ten Thousand Years Soul Ring after absorbing one piece of See Through Autumn Water Dew. If you want to cheat the protagonist, be more obvious. Don't say it's close to the original work. If you say it's close to the original work, then I'll use my brain to read it. If I want to use my brain to read it, I'll compare you with the original work!

I feel like the author can't distinguish between priorities. Who is the protagonist in this book? Why write so many supporting roles? The protagonist wants to do whatever he wants. But you must also show your own blood. Gou Daoliu is not marginalizing his own existence. As you write, you marginalize your protagonist's role. If the protagonist doesn't have the momentum to move forward in his work, how can he get God's attention? This way of writing makes no sense. Wouldn't the author take a look and see that the number of people urging updates has been reduced by half?

I think it's okay from the front, as long as we don't make peace with the Blue Lightning Tyrant Dragon Sect. Don't write when you feel aggrieved. For example, if the author's protagonist is powerful, he must never pretend to be a pig and eat the tiger again. I feel like I have read so many fanfics, and many of them are like this. Someone who has strength pretends to be a pig and eats a tiger. The protagonist has strength, so don't do this.

Why don't you take money if you are so bloody? You are an adult time traveler. Can't you be more diplomatic? How much is ambition worth? It's really hard to eat hard.

The author's level needs to be improved Some original characters. Just forget it if the background doesn't match The author is not good at writing the highlight and climax moments of the protagonist, such as the protagonist joining the Haotian Sect. The Haotian Sect was completely offended, and two titled Douluo were killed. The protagonist's request is just some resources and various secret techniques (it can be explained without killing them all, the plot needs them later, but the young generation with potential in the Haotian Sect should always kill them all). Behind the four single-attribute families, Titan directly threatens you and Yang Wudi directly attacks you. In the end, you just threatened Titan with your eyes and smashed the martial spirit that Yang Wudi recognized towards you. If I remember correctly, the author The setting for the protagonist is to kill decisively (seeing this, I thought the protagonist would let the big one go, but it turned out to be a big deal for me. I really can't figure out what the consequences will be if you wipe out all four single-attribute families. After all, the enemy will not thank you because you kill too few. After all, if you kill more and less, they all want to kill you. Ning Fengzhi knows that those who offend should be dealt with as soon as possible, otherwise it will only cause you more trouble)

Write well. If you dare to mess up again, I will beat you to death.